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gratitude ~ {iv}
{v}
one look at
those baby blues
& i wanted to
suck you off
like a geisha
on an opium pipe,
smearing
dior stained lust
along the length
of your
blood swollen pulse
{iv}
i've given great thought
to digging these
six inch heels into
your shoulders
{iii}
fuck drunk,
rocking into the
darjeeling darling
press of digits.
i counted three
& thanked you
for the thought
{ii}
i said it
over & over
& over again
into
the empty room.
mewled it
at the ceiling.
i might have made
a god of you.
{i}
i stifled a whimper
into slate coloured pillows
wishing they were blue
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Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
Anonymous
16th Jul 2017 3:06pm
you write classics all the time now shadoe...thanks from m

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Re: Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
16th Jul 2017 3:46pm
Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
Anonymous
16th Jul 2017 3:30pm
My Beautiful Ballerina...well you had me at "suck you off" and then held me as the chachi cup approached my lips when I giggled saying "vein? Did someone imply vein??" *gigglegasps* An amazing act when we turn flesh and blood into such a creature...would be even more amazing if the thought was always returned, ltm...always such a pleasure to read you gorgeous. Love you to endless bits!
Hugs love and endless snuggles
your darling of minxy darlings
xoxoxoxxoxoxo
Hugs love and endless snuggles
your darling of minxy darlings
xoxoxoxxoxoxo

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Re: Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
16th Jul 2017 3:40pm
veins *drools a little* you know i get all cross eyed at the mere mention of dorsal veins omg yum. also thank you muchly for reading me, minx xo
Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
16th Jul 2017 3:58pm
Hottdamn woman!! Got my 'pulse' all steely hard n slinging round banging my kneecaps! lol oops... sorry mami TMI... lol ;)
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Re: Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
16th Jul 2017 5:50pm
Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
What an image filled, get me dorsal vien hard, while keeping my heart soft, write !
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16th Jul 2017 5:52pm
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5th Aug 2017 5:50pm
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5th Aug 2017 5:59pm
Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
16th Jul 2017 4:19pm
Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
16th Jul 2017 4:29pm
'Slobbing the knob'........what a beautiful sensual act, my favorite pastime stimulant.😉
Your writing is so sexy to me dancedoll.💖
Your writing is so sexy to me dancedoll.💖
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Re: Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
16th Jul 2017 6:09pm
bagpiping... cock gobbling... bone lipping... face frosting... oral sodomy... suck starting the harley...zipper dinner... lol it's a fave. thanks rainy xo
Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
Anonymous
16th Jul 2017 5:14pm
To read you when one is already.....on edge.....is about as clever as poping ones love spuds into a lions mouth and flicking his nuts with a wet tea towel......dangerous as fuck.
The tequila isnt the only thing that flows.....ok time for a cold shower and about a million hail Mary's....see you when im 80.
Just incase it isnt clear....this is fucking epic..literally.
B xx
The tequila isnt the only thing that flows.....ok time for a cold shower and about a million hail Mary's....see you when im 80.
Just incase it isnt clear....this is fucking epic..literally.
B xx

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Re: Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
16th Jul 2017 6:17pm
oh lord funniest comment ever, benji! i'd offer the use my rosary beads... but no knowing where those have been. cheers so much for reading xx
Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
16th Jul 2017 5:47pm
romantically cock hungry - definitely an original concept - this is so well written I enjoyed every word :-)
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Re: Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
16th Jul 2017 6:19pm
Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
16th Jul 2017 9:21pm
Love the symmetry:
one look at
those baby blues
& i wanted to
suck you off
like a geisha
then at the end
i stifled a whimper
into slate coloured pillows
wishing they were blue
Is the color coordination intentional? Might be all in my noggin. My own baby blues are a little crossed these days.
one look at
those baby blues
& i wanted to
suck you off
like a geisha
then at the end
i stifled a whimper
into slate coloured pillows
wishing they were blue
Is the color coordination intentional? Might be all in my noggin. My own baby blues are a little crossed these days.
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Re: Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
16th Jul 2017 9:24pm
ha! not intentional no... there was a moment of wishful thinking this morning that worked its way into an unfinished poem. thanks for reading, mister... cross eyed and all xo
Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
Anonymous
17th Jul 2017 2:03pm
Okay, did you hear me gulp and suck in breath? Made the mistake of reading this one at work...thank the gods nobody else is here yet! I still have time to go hit that ice machine! Blushing from toes to roots here...

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Re: Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
19th Jul 2017 7:07pm
it's so good to know i am not the only heathen reading erotica at work ltm very bad habit but i'm a koshka and koshka's are naturally curious. thanks so much for reading, ash xo
Re. gratitude ~ {iv}
19th Jul 2017 8:24am
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19th Jul 2017 7:07pm