Satellite

The search for the buoyant star
In a canopy of dark sky and far
The bold knight will raise a war
And play hymns with his guitar
 
                      Well composed and compiled. Rhyme felt natural, unforced alongside meaning and stories encapsulated in each line.


Fate has delivered us together
Finding home among strangers
The veiled innuendo still lingers
Lost souls of vindicated beavers
 
       Half-rhyme and metaphor. Blended well.



Destiny played trick like before
Face my guilt with such candor
I will hoist my sail to the shore
As my allegiance to strive more

          L2 is am unsure about the first word, otherwise a good stanza again.
 
Distance can be a vengeful kin
Though aim comes from within
Heart engrossed as angel sings
Our love flows an eternal thing

                         upbeat, optimistic and positive
 
Time stole our chance to grow
Casting spell from down below
When the river ceased to flow
My triumph will freeze in snow

                                good work. Same as last stanza
 
Fallen from grim battleground
I mutter a cry without a sound
Spirit wasted in hallow ground
And heart flees to ghost town

     'Spirit wasted in hallowed ground'- special line.
 
Curtains pulled this forth hence
The life shared of grand intense
Your love embodies my essence
We’re blessed by Omnipotence
    
there is natural flow here. Good.


When the envious moon fades
Soul will turn from land of dead
I will not dither never be afraid
My scene is beside you instead

L4 is the heart of the stanza. Good job.

 
The first glow after a long night
A spark of dawn lends an invite
Where the sun shines so bright
I watch over you like a satellite  

Title justified. L4 the word 'over' is ok  but feels extra. Your poem. your work. Good job.

Such elaborate insight. Thanks for dropping by.

we struggle beneath that dark sky and far,
knights & poets alike; & lovers.
well made lyrics...

Appreciate it John. Cheers mate.

Fantastic expression and use of imagery, taking the reader through an illustrative theme.

Thanks for the compliment Ms. Taylor. Cheers.