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the edge of sanity
you always wear
your pain to bed
cotton candied delusions
that stick
you can't wash them away
no the madness stays
& you enjoy it
same as a midnight showing
of a horror flick
you glory in it
the darkness of it all
it's like riding a carnival ride
until it makes you sick
or looking into a fun house mirror
until all you see is the lies
the lethal kind
that make you a true believer
baptized born again
as you speak in a tongue
no one understands
you're all in insane
placed a high roller bet
when you're holding jokers
that wink at you
& you know their laughing behind your back
when the world is no longer friendly
which brightly colored pill
will save you?
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Re. the edge of sanity
24th May 2017 10:30am
Sounds like a Matrixian choice... I choose black. Darkness is so much easier to swallow when coated in light...
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Re: Re. the edge of sanity
thank you JJ for such an interesting comment.. today I chose not to take all of my meds and this is the end result.. love Brenda
Re. the edge of sanity
24th May 2017 12:33pm
it's a short drop from the edge, Crim;
I figure they're dealin' from the bottom of the deck at that poker table...
I figure they're dealin' from the bottom of the deck at that poker table...
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Re: Re. the edge of sanity
24th May 2017 3:39pm
thank you John you always know just what to say to make me smile & it's appreciated :) love Crim
Re. the edge of sanity
Anonymous
24th May 2017 2:02pm
Dear one, this is a stark look into what it's like when all is not right. To be forced to choose between little pills to keep balance, I have no comprehension of what that's like. Only what it's like when I'm out of balance and struggling. Much love and many hugs, my lady
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Re: Re. the edge of sanity
24th May 2017 3:41pm
thank you lovely one yes it is I suppose.. though it was my own fault I was on edge yesterday.. I didn't take all my meds.. thankfully I feel more on track in my heart & mind.. I love you.. love Crim
Re. the edge of sanity
24th May 2017 3:35pm
ye put the edge right there sitah with thisdark write. ya colors always are a shade of deep, both in light and in dark..some talent
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Re: Re. the edge of sanity
24th May 2017 3:43pm
thank you Walker for a most gracious comment.. yes I am both dark & light in equal measures usually there is more of a balance between the two but without my meds I was swinging precariously between the two yesterday.. love Crimsin
Re. the edge of sanity
Anonymous
24th May 2017 3:49pm
I have felt this close to the edge more than once , like linkin park , one step closer and I'm about to break.
Breaks my heart but love the write
Breaks my heart but love the write
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Re: Re. the edge of sanity
24th May 2017 4:48pm
dearest Ragnar I feel for you as well for understanding this write.. by the way I love that song it went with my state of mind for many years.. love Crim
Re. the edge of sanity
24th May 2017 7:01pm
Re: Re. the edge of sanity
24th May 2017 7:30pm
thank you Tim as much as I hate the way this write confronts me it tell me I need to stay diligent with my meds.. love Brenda
Re: Re. the edge of sanity
24th May 2017 11:07pm
Re. the edge of sanity
25th May 2017 1:00am
It's a place I know only too well - you hit the nail right on the head with this one - lend me that hammer so I can hit any detractors - mettafforrikly speaking of course :-)
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Re: Re. the edge of sanity
25th May 2017 10:49am
thank you David only feel for you that you know this place all too well.. you made me laugh with your comment about detractors :) love Brenda
Re. the edge of sanity
25th May 2017 3:28am
This is really cool with an amazing ending, I love candy references in poems......
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Re: Re. the edge of sanity
25th May 2017 10:50am
Re. the edge of sanity
Anonymous
25th May 2017 3:53am
My Beautiful Brenda, I know not what it is like to have to turn to medication to help with the tricks one's mind can play...I can say this...my mind works overtime MUCH of the time and perhaps I could benefit from one or two of those pills...from now on I will be sure to do my part so this doesn't happen again...it pains my soul when this happens.
I love you passionately!
With all my love - Taryn xoxo
I love you passionately!
With all my love - Taryn xoxo
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Re: Re. the edge of sanity
25th May 2017 10:52am
thank you my love yeah the mind can play tricks on you alright & I appreciate deeply your reminders on my meds it was me who decided to skip them this day may this write be a reminder why I shouldn't.. I love you so much! xo Brenda
Re. the edge of sanity
Anonymous
28th May 2017 4:35pm
dunno bout anyone else, but my favorite colour is valium o.O
the metaphors are amazing (but that's par for the course when reading you)
loved this one, beautiful lady
xo
the metaphors are amazing (but that's par for the course when reading you)
loved this one, beautiful lady
xo
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Re: Re. the edge of sanity
28th May 2017 4:42pm
thank you beautiful one you made me giggle with the valium comment wish my doc would give me some :) I deeply appreciate your thoughts on this write.. love you lady.. xo Brenda