Comparisons

Thank you, Tod.  Your words are far more than I had expected from anyone.

Well, from you... :3

the sound of silence:
we can hear the poem as it speaks;
what's the art from?

(in a different format & previous century, this would've been Emily Dickinson...)

Emily Dickinson, oh gawd, John... such praise that is to me because over a year ago I wrote a tribute to her.  I've even emulated her writing style in some small verse of ink I did but I've never published any of them.  And thank you for your comment before that.  You often write bits of poetry in response to poetry, you know that.

A hypnotic read...I was enthralled

I thank you, dear Tim, for sharing that with me, and for a place of honor on your Reading List.

You have a real gift for imagery Jade.

while the tops of their umbrellas
scattered like crows

then

heard, silent & empty, my
breath faint on a window pane.

Really sets a mood fine lady, and in just a few evocative words.  Excellent

*softly* Thank you, my dear crowfly friend, for such an endearing response to my humble ink.  And I've been thinking of you lately.

while the tops of their umbrellas  
scattered like crows  
  
who also spoke not a word,  
but I'll never know, for I never  
  
heard, silent & empty, my  
breath faint on a window pane.-

I keep returning and again to this moment...  I feel this room, this rumming, this day.  I will probably read it again and again.  As I am reading "is there a category for lonesome" over and over again...

Thank you, thomas, for honoring my little piece with the trilogy.  

As for the lonesome piece, yes... so do I, because I'm still living it...

Congratulations! This poem has been nominated for Deep Underground Poetry's Featured Poem of the Month Competition. You may view the nomination at the link below, and will be notified if selected.  

https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/9621/30/#393759

Best of Luck and thank you for being a member of the Deep Side! Poet

Thank you so much, our dear Poem-Worm! <3

This makes me wonder what the narrator was contemplating while looking out the window. It feels melancholy to me today, but on another, it might feel differently. I like what you've done with assonance throughout the poem, breaking from the rhyme scheme of the first three stanzas, but carrying those sounds through the last two. It's a lovely read.

Ahh, thank you so much for your lovely read of my humble piece, and the understanding you share with me that goes with it.

This is an awesome write, one i think that many can relate to, your word choice was spot on and the write immediately draws the reader in.

I should've just copy and pasted it and written awesome hahaha


Ben

Why thank you, dear Ben, how thoughtful is your support & appreciation.

Grateful for how much you like my effort. :)