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I disturbed the quiet
peace of the place
~~~
I'm not a pebble
that lightly skims the surface
making gentle ripples in the water
~~~
I'm like a rock that causes waves
that wash you away
~~~
I enjoy your silence
I sit here & take it in
it teaches me something about peace
~~~
a thing I don't know much about
with my chaotic mind
~~~
better than any anxiety med
as I rest in your reverie
it's a meditation of sorts
~~~
to see how long
I can still my mind
& not disrupt the mood
of this beautiful sacred pool
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Anonymous
14th May 2017 12:02pm
You've started writing in a much more observational way lately. Moved away from the dark and the abstract and this really seems to be working for you. This is a fine example of finding a moment and being immersed in its poetry.
Gorgeous work my dear.
Gorgeous work my dear.
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14th May 2017 1:33pm
thank you graciously Missy I've tried what I know.. now I'm trying something foreign to me.. love Brenda
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14th May 2017 1:33pm
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14th May 2017 12:41pm
Ah, I couldn't agree more with Missy, this is so peaceful and you pass that tranquillity onto your readers of these beautiful words.
I've been falling to sleep the past week or so listening to the these two songs and your poem reminds me of the feeling they bring. :) x
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Il5Ps-WFDHM
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pzm9bF9oLqw
I've been falling to sleep the past week or so listening to the these two songs and your poem reminds me of the feeling they bring. :) x
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Il5Ps-WFDHM
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pzm9bF9oLqw
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14th May 2017 1:35pm
thank you beautiful Magdalena I'm happy it came across tranquil :) I deeply appreciate the music here's one I found I thought you may enjoy.. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ppl9H-vIRYQ love Brenda
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14th May 2017 1:13pm
You are the stillness in my breath as I await the rising sun... meditation is good for the soul
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14th May 2017 1:36pm
thank you Tim what a lovely thing to say :) here's to the sunrise.. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ppl9H-vIRYQ love Brenda
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14th May 2017 1:54pm
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14th May 2017 6:38pm
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14th May 2017 3:46pm
I love who you are and I am glad you are what you are - I don't wish for you to be different, just happy :-)
1000 ehugs on their way :-)
1000 ehugs on their way :-)
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14th May 2017 6:39pm
thank you David for loving me just as I am :) love you to my friend.. big hugs back.. love Brenda
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Anonymous
15th May 2017 00:56am
My Beautiful Brenda, such tranquility in these words...they bring upon a peaceful calm...your warm essence has lit up the page my love...
I love you
Love Taryn xoxo
I love you
Love Taryn xoxo
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15th May 2017 6:07am
thank you beautiful one it was 3 am and I came in here disturbing the silence & this was inspired :) I'm so happy it brought you peace.. I love you.. xo Brenda
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Anonymous
15th May 2017 9:21pm
I get it pretty lady,
omfg, can't even begin to form a proper comment for you here.<3
omfg, can't even begin to form a proper comment for you here.<3
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15th May 2017 9:37pm
thank you beautiful lady your response is perfect & gave me quite a smile :) love Crim
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Anonymous
16th May 2017 9:14pm
This is beautifully written and very relatable to alot of people, your word choice is first class and you create an atmosphere that seems to flow with each line. Also, a great example of how the format of a poem makes you absorb every word.
Awesome write.
Ben
Awesome write.
Ben
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17th May 2017 7:26pm
thank you most graciously Ben what a wonderful comment I'm really enjoying reading you.. you have a lot of beauty and wisdom within your soul.. love Brenda
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17th May 2017 1:54pm
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17th May 2017 7:27pm
thank you Rose these kind of writes give me peace as well happy it did so for you :) love Crim
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17th May 2017 9:02pm
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17th May 2017 11:59pm
thank you Dave this was a meditation of sorts one morning my mind was unruly.. love you my brother.. xo Brenda