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Far Away Rain
Subtle thoughts of yesterday rumble
in every dancing bolt of energy
across a sacrificial sky
Tepid droplets of moisture awaken
senses once lost and lonely
seeking to breathe another day
Thunder rings out loudly
(or is that your heart?)
calling out my name
Water falling down gentle
eyes and hands wide open
catching every part of you
in every dancing bolt of energy
across a sacrificial sky
Tepid droplets of moisture awaken
senses once lost and lonely
seeking to breathe another day
Thunder rings out loudly
(or is that your heart?)
calling out my name
Water falling down gentle
eyes and hands wide open
catching every part of you
Published 11th May 2017
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11th May 2017 1:40pm
Anonymous
11th May 2017 1:50pm
That first stanza set the most amazing imagery in my mind and it just kept building. I revel in days/nights like this! Beautiful!
11th May 2017 3:24pm
11th May 2017 3:33pm
11th May 2017 3:33pm
I agree with all of the previous comments, you surely had me on the edge with every line and what a climatic finish it was!
Love love love this!
V
Love love love this!
V
11th May 2017 4:10pm
11th May 2017 5:29pm
12th May 2017 4:03am
12th May 2017 6:39am
Again... you gave us some beautiful imagery...
"Thunder rings out loudly
(or is that your heart?)
calling out my name" > my favorite stanza, though I love them all...
"Thunder rings out loudly
(or is that your heart?)
calling out my name" > my favorite stanza, though I love them all...
Anonymous
15th May 2017 2:59pm
This is an awesome write, I love your word choice and laying it out as you have really adds to the gravity of what you're saying.
Great Write.
Ben
Great Write.
Ben
Anonymous
18th Jun 2018 10:47pm
Beautifully expressed. Love it.
18th Jun 2018 11:06pm
