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Bleak Eternity
I know that life is better now,
that rose-inflected vision cannot be;
to make the most of this coil
improves mortality.
I hear that looking to the past
is an unhealthy thing,
a strange disease to be described
as like a suffering.
But I still chase the light
of worlds I cannot see,
arrested as I always am
by bleak eternity.
that rose-inflected vision cannot be;
to make the most of this coil
improves mortality.
I hear that looking to the past
is an unhealthy thing,
a strange disease to be described
as like a suffering.
But I still chase the light
of worlds I cannot see,
arrested as I always am
by bleak eternity.
Published 14th Apr 2017
| Edited 27th Sep 2018
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14th Apr 2017 8:03pm
This is such a far-reaching write, Jack. Not just to history but to the future as well - for things past and those yet to come. Our yearning heart sometimes dictates that which our mind doesn't yet remember.
Hiraeth. That's what this reminds me of. It's well-done with an underlying trace of classic.
Hiraeth. That's what this reminds me of. It's well-done with an underlying trace of classic.
14th Apr 2017 8:19pm
14th Apr 2017 8:37pm
14th Apr 2017 10:40pm
a last verse to build a dream on - an appreciation of future finer than W.Blake
utopia/dystopia as if hope itself was anti-gravitational matter
utopia/dystopia as if hope itself was anti-gravitational matter
15th Apr 2017 11:45pm
I really enjoyed reading this poem. It struck a chord with me, especially that second verse. Well done!
Anonymous
17th Apr 2017 5:49pm
hullo, good fellow first thoughts were: things must be fifty five shades of Dickons' bleak to have to break out the rhyme scheme.
granted, it reads well. and there are some decent ..phonetically endearing lines in there. and, in its own way it does carry its weight in bleak-ary. or at the very least lends itself to the whole sense of bleak.
I suppose my only dislike of the above is it's apparent dumb-down to meet the rhyme scheme ..dislike is probably the wrong word. I'll try think of a better one
granted, it reads well. and there are some decent ..phonetically endearing lines in there. and, in its own way it does carry its weight in bleak-ary. or at the very least lends itself to the whole sense of bleak.
I suppose my only dislike of the above is it's apparent dumb-down to meet the rhyme scheme ..dislike is probably the wrong word. I'll try think of a better one
