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Needless aggravation
water in a glass
clear as crystal
moving with a gentle sway
as she carries the tray
towards them
smiling at the doily
under a pretty cake
she puts the glass down
but one of them
takes it up, misses
and the glass falls
shatters at her feet
her visions go grey
and she closes her eyes
it is going to be a long day
first day at work
and this shit happens
gonna pay for the glass
there'll be no tip
I got a son to feed
she looks away
wishes she can slap someone
especially the guy
who broke the glass
who is laughing
I hate this job
I hate this existence
most of all I hate this man
who has aggravated my migraine
on my first day at work...
she says
in her mind
and sweeps the broken glass away.
*this poem was entered in a competition here. thank you for reading*
Published 7th Apr 2017
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7th Apr 2017 3:37am
I wish lashing back was an option but that doesn't pay the bills. You created quite a picture with this. Good luck in the comp. 🌷
7th Apr 2017 4:38am
You tell a clear and concise story here that is evocative and easy to sympathize with. You keep to flowing simply, solid and clean. Great work Grace. I'm glad you did well in the comp.
7th Apr 2017 8:34am
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7th Apr 2017 6:04am
Hy there beautiful, firstly I love your picture
Secondly, I totally can relate lmbo..Comp or
not.
Gotta love'em! makes the world go round
Secondly, I totally can relate lmbo..Comp or
not.
Gotta love'em! makes the world go round
7th Apr 2017 8:35am
Thank you for liking my picture. Just old me though. Thanks for coming by and reading Spiltsunsets_XVII.
7th Apr 2017 7:32am
Definitely a relatable piece, I think we can all relate to this piece.
~anonshadow😏
~anonshadow😏
7th Apr 2017 8:36am
7th Apr 2017 10:21am
Oh yea, definitely made me feel like slapping the piss outta that clown! I mean really, accidentally breaking something n then showing remorse is certainly
easier to get over than watching someone get a damn kick out it
like it's the highlight of their day
n not caring what it means to the one left to clean it up. Excellent storytelling! N congrats Grace :)
easier to get over than watching someone get a damn kick out it
like it's the highlight of their day
n not caring what it means to the one left to clean it up. Excellent storytelling! N congrats Grace :)
7th Apr 2017 2:23pm
Hi Poetik:) I know what you mean. I have been on that brink so many times. Thanks for reading me as always. Much appreciated.
7th Apr 2017 11:38am
I love the realistic picture this poem paints... it's like I was in her shoes and felt her annoyance, pain and misery. Had like a groundhog day feel to it for me.
Great little piece Grace
FC
💜
Great little piece Grace
FC
💜
7th Apr 2017 2:25pm
Dear FC thank you for coming by and reading.:) such aggravation can be so painful, especially when you have to mind yourself and not give in to anger.
7th Apr 2017 7:33pm
A full story from beginning to end - kept me wondering what will happen next; and so well observed. Thank you.
7th Apr 2017 11:12pm
Hi Josh. Thank you for reading and for kindly commenting. Her life went on to interesting adventures but only in my brain...:) I might write it down some day.
7th Apr 2017 9:39pm
I waited myself through college so could fully relate to this, Grace. I kinda agree with Josh in that I wonder what happens next...a series would be interesting.
7th Apr 2017 11:14pm
Thank you Ahavati for reading:) and commenting. Writing about her is now niggling in my brain. Lol.
8th Apr 2017 1:04am
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8th Apr 2017 6:50pm
Fine work Grace. You report the trauma of the poor waitress then get directly into her thoughts in the next to last stanza. She speaks of hatred when her temper flares. This seems a normal reaction to me. If the "hatred" persists that's when it becomes a problem. I suspect she grew more benign with additional job experience. Still, that customer is a jerk who should have gotten the refill dumped in his lap. Fun to think about.....
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