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There's little etiquette
when trying to stand still
From deep within my chorus
song wails till verse weeps
Before the feasting finds you
doing just that
When trying to stand still.
There's little etiquette
when trying to stand still
From deep within my chorus
song wails till verse weeps
Before the feasting finds you
doing just that
When trying to stand still.
Published 3rd Apr 2017
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4th Apr 2017 4:31am
Simply beautiful.
I love the opening line- 'there's this little etiquette'. It feels timid, not sure if that was your intention, but it really establishes the mood for the rest of your piece.
I love the opening line- 'there's this little etiquette'. It feels timid, not sure if that was your intention, but it really establishes the mood for the rest of your piece.
4th Apr 2017 6:27am
Etiquette goes out of the window
when standing & awaiting deliveries of
Incredible pleasures
when standing & awaiting deliveries of
Incredible pleasures
