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The beach
I used to love
Warm white sand
Between my toes
Like soft sugar
I’d lie
And watch the world
Go by
As I turned
Brown and crisp
Intermittent trips
Into the sea
To cool off
And be cool
Strutting back
To my hammock
Clutching a cocktail
This is living alright
I was never happier
Than I was
On the beach
A bronzed Adonis
Well in my mind
At least
The beach
I now hate
Hate with a fiery passion
Soft white sand
That a wheelchair
Won’t get through
I wheel along the pier
Trying to avoid
Eye contact
With the beach
And those
On it
I’d lie
If I said I don’t
Miss it
I watch the world
Go by
With my back to
The beach
I couldn’t get into
A hammock
I am not allowed
Alcoholic cocktails
I no longer see
The bronzed Adonis
Just half a man
With a seaside
Longing
Published 23rd Mar 2017
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23rd Mar 2017 5:17am
Oh my, this is so beautifully written.
Adonis is still there,
the sand between your toes,
the warmth of the sun on your face,
the salty ocean bubbles popping on your skin,
It's all still there - inside. Close your eyes, and live.
Adonis is still there,
the sand between your toes,
the warmth of the sun on your face,
the salty ocean bubbles popping on your skin,
It's all still there - inside. Close your eyes, and live.
23rd Mar 2017 5:23pm
that is the most beautiful response I have ever had to one of my poems - thank you I am bowled over :-)
25th Mar 2017 3:20am
Awe David....this breaks me......I feel a tear dripping from my heart to share with yours.......beautiful visual in the beginning......then the reality of now is heart gripping........sad but amazing ink that I know is truth.......sending purple luv & hugs your way xo :)
26th Mar 2017 2:54am
strangely the second stanza was a second thought - it would be a very different poem with just the first stanza :-) sending back 1000 ehugs (purple of course) :-)
26th Mar 2017 4:03am
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8th Apr 2017 7:43am
I used to live in Florida but haven't been back in over 30yrs. What i miss the most is the smell of salt in the air while fishing off the pier, those were some good times, thanx for taking me back. Much love and mad respect,
me
me
8th Apr 2017 6:51pm
I have lived close to the sea almost all of my adult life - I feel weird when I go to the city :-) thanks for the read and the comment :-)
