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[2017] Pawn Star
How admirable---
you jumping into battle
with your rap babble
in service of beleaguered
Red Bobble Headed Queens
All your hip hop hopscotch
on the marbled board
impressive, top notch
Unfortunately
gotch yourself
skipping over tiled-
behind-the-seen scenes
Privy to
what this means
you weren't
Rookie rooked, someday
you may slow the charge
not be so quick to defend
and allow yourself time
to become learnt
before these new bridges
being built way too long
extend to the point you
end up getting your bacon
cooked when burnt
Published 12th Mar 2017
| Edited 10th Aug 2020
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12th Mar 2017 2:42pm
Good advice in excellent poetic form. I honestly have no critique to offer. It's solid in form.
Too many people believe what they hear vs actually researching the truth. Perhaps they're lonely, or want to belong. It's sad for them but mostly sad for truth.
My father told me over a game of chess once, that defending the truth was like a tiny ant defending a mighty elephant, precious but unnecessary. It's the first time I ever heard of Buddha, when he quoted him:
"Three things cannot be long hidden: the sun, the moon, and the truth." (paraphrased from the history of the quote and its origins thereof...my father was meticulous in details.)
I must've been around 9 or 10 years old. I've seen it throughout my life prove itself true. There's wisdom in the wait, but also pain amid the trust.
Thank you for sharing.
Too many people believe what they hear vs actually researching the truth. Perhaps they're lonely, or want to belong. It's sad for them but mostly sad for truth.
My father told me over a game of chess once, that defending the truth was like a tiny ant defending a mighty elephant, precious but unnecessary. It's the first time I ever heard of Buddha, when he quoted him:
"Three things cannot be long hidden: the sun, the moon, and the truth." (paraphrased from the history of the quote and its origins thereof...my father was meticulous in details.)
I must've been around 9 or 10 years old. I've seen it throughout my life prove itself true. There's wisdom in the wait, but also pain amid the trust.
Thank you for sharing.
12th Mar 2017 3:09pm
I agree with Ahavati, great poem and excellent advice.
“A thing is not necessarily true because a man dies for it.”
― Oscar Wilde
“A thing is not necessarily true because a man dies for it.”
― Oscar Wilde
13th Mar 2017 2:30pm
We leap into action far too fast, whereas a little pause would allow life to offer a better option. I guess if we don't find out the hard way, then we don't find out at all, and end up living in a shrinking comfort zone.
It captures the sentiment really well.
It captures the sentiment really well.
13th Mar 2017 2:37pm
The unschooled will always go through life gasping for breath after realising they'll most likely die, as the unforgiven.
