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Alabaster Bursts Of Heaven
Crimson's luster illuminates a brilliant bead
satin strokes of beauty a bottle bleeds
scratch softly across this barren chest
and along with moonbeams, shall you rest
Silver streaks of goodness held in place
passion's pure pleasure soon will trace
circle past tiny smudges born in haste
where one more night we shan't waste
Starlit moments soar as solace sleeps
dear reflection of radiance forever keeps
in gentle arms of hope true love is staged
consoling promises from battle's waged
Alabaster bursts of heaven gently weave
Another night in comfort we shall receive
satin strokes of beauty a bottle bleeds
scratch softly across this barren chest
and along with moonbeams, shall you rest
Silver streaks of goodness held in place
passion's pure pleasure soon will trace
circle past tiny smudges born in haste
where one more night we shan't waste
Starlit moments soar as solace sleeps
dear reflection of radiance forever keeps
in gentle arms of hope true love is staged
consoling promises from battle's waged
Alabaster bursts of heaven gently weave
Another night in comfort we shall receive
Published 7th Mar 2017
| Edited 8th Mar 2017
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7th Mar 2017 8:40pm
I enjoyed a lot of the imagery in this, Tim. The undertone is soft and sensual with a lining of hope and light.
8th Mar 2017 3:24pm
8th Mar 2017 3:47pm
Tim,
This is beautiful! Thank you. For me, paints a picture of lifelong, forever love. I am holding on to this one!
My only feedback is to enter a comma where YOU would pause for emphasis.
Example: "and along with moonbeams, shall you rest" - that is where I paused...where would you if reading aloud?
LOVE this!
This is beautiful! Thank you. For me, paints a picture of lifelong, forever love. I am holding on to this one!
My only feedback is to enter a comma where YOU would pause for emphasis.
Example: "and along with moonbeams, shall you rest" - that is where I paused...where would you if reading aloud?
LOVE this!
8th Mar 2017 4:51pm
Thank you so much dear. I see exactly what you mean...I treasure your comment and honoured you added it to your RL
Anonymous
14th Mar 2017 3:33pm
Gentle passion, filled with convicted hope resonates in this one...done with elegance. Very nice write Tim.
Xoxo Taryn
Xoxo Taryn
