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Dark Plane
The curtain is pulled back
To reveal the dark abyss
Beyond the throes of life
Within your head a voice
Sweet, mysteriously alluring
Compels you to move closer
The darkness beckons
It is conscious
It moves as though
It is alive, somehow
A darkness so thick
It pours itself
Like a blanket of liquid
You reach out
To touch it
It's comfortably cold
It moves through your fingers
Like cosmic sand
Thoughts race through your mind
Truths reveal themselves to you
An enlightenment takes hold
As an ah! Escapes your soul
All things become clear
The meaning of life
Reveals its face
As you step into the dark Plane of this life's death
(C) 2017 xmar82 all rights reserved
Published 21st Feb 2017
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21st Feb 2017 5:28am
21st Feb 2017 5:40am
21st Feb 2017 3:32pm
Wow. I love it! I was pouring coffee while reading this and almost over filled my cup because I couldn't stop reading. It definitely hooks you,pulls you in and when you're done reading it you're left reflecting on deep thoughts.Great work. Thanks for sharing!
21st Feb 2017 4:08pm
21st Feb 2017 7:40pm
These lines -
The meaning of life
Reveals its face
As you step into the dark Plane of this life's death
Such a powerful and eloquent ending. Only at the end of all things, do we discover the beginning, only too late to make the journey anew with the knowledge. The flow of this piece is masterful. The only line that gave me pause was "As an ah! Escapes your soul" - while I understand the implication, it interrupted the roll for me, it took the lull and added a bit of a bump I wasn't expecting. That remainder of this piece reads like a drape of silk.
I greatly enjoyed this poem.
The meaning of life
Reveals its face
As you step into the dark Plane of this life's death
Such a powerful and eloquent ending. Only at the end of all things, do we discover the beginning, only too late to make the journey anew with the knowledge. The flow of this piece is masterful. The only line that gave me pause was "As an ah! Escapes your soul" - while I understand the implication, it interrupted the roll for me, it took the lull and added a bit of a bump I wasn't expecting. That remainder of this piece reads like a drape of silk.
I greatly enjoyed this poem.
22nd Feb 2017 3:08am
