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Survivor
Grappling to find the will,
the will to survive.
Outstretched,
my palms lay flat like the corners of my mind.
Inside,
a sweet solitude I find.
Without doubt,
there are no questions.
I am left unhinged and free.
Safely, I hide.
Left alone,
uninhibited by time.
The quiet soothes me.
Shadows dance lazily across the ceiling.
I blink once, twice.
It's shape sparks a flicker of memory.
The quiet swiftly stirs
A sharp pang rattles my skull.
Voices begin to grow deafening.
Worry deepens the furrows in my brow.
Thoughts, here, are a dark plague.
The struggle is within,
within my mind.
I must find the will,
the will to survive.
the will to survive.
Outstretched,
my palms lay flat like the corners of my mind.
Inside,
a sweet solitude I find.
Without doubt,
there are no questions.
I am left unhinged and free.
Safely, I hide.
Left alone,
uninhibited by time.
The quiet soothes me.
Shadows dance lazily across the ceiling.
I blink once, twice.
It's shape sparks a flicker of memory.
The quiet swiftly stirs
A sharp pang rattles my skull.
Voices begin to grow deafening.
Worry deepens the furrows in my brow.
Thoughts, here, are a dark plague.
The struggle is within,
within my mind.
I must find the will,
the will to survive.
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Re. Survivor
16th Feb 2017 5:48am
this poem reminds me of Pink Floyd for some reason,
it soothes me wen reading it, but the meaning is a little disturbing
beautiful poem !
and welcome to DUP :)
it soothes me wen reading it, but the meaning is a little disturbing
beautiful poem !
and welcome to DUP :)
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Re: Re. Survivor
16th Feb 2017 6:35am
Re. Survivor
16th Feb 2017 7:02am
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17th Feb 2017 2:11am
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16th Feb 2017 2:23pm
Re: Re. Survivor
17th Feb 2017 2:13am
Thank you whale for the kind greeting. I'm looking forward to getting familiar with DUP. (:
Re. Survivor
16th Feb 2017 4:53pm
A really interesting poem and nice imagery of the dancing shadows and thoughts are a dark plague. The way I interpreted it was as a battle against yourself, possibly even a mental health write - is that correct? Anyway, skillfully written 😊 X
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Re: Re. Survivor
17th Feb 2017 2:16am
Yes, you are correct Stephanie. I suppose, a theme of this poem could be self anguish.
Re. Survivor
16th Feb 2017 9:38pm
this write had different stages of emotions for as I read through but ended in strength, could survival be all that's left in the aftermath, quite possibly. I like this. nicely penned.
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Re: Re. Survivor
17th Feb 2017 2:18am
Thank you for the nice compliment Shadez. I am glad you enjoyed it's various tones; highs and lows. The flow of this poem is not meant to be drawn in a straight line.
Re. Survivor
18th Feb 2017 7:29am
Having to fight within the mind. It's a painful fight that some lose to.
Great poem 😁
Great poem 😁
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18th Feb 2017 2:21pm
Re. Survivor
20th Feb 2017 4:05am
Welcome to DU and solitude is all I know I am a survivor too and have been through a lot more than people know
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Re. Survivor
20th Feb 2017 8:46pm
Thank you Kavik1. (:
Solitude has its benefits, however, no man is an island. It is important to create a balance.
Solitude has its benefits, however, no man is an island. It is important to create a balance.
Re. Survivor
26th Feb 2017 10:24am
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1st Mar 2017 6:39am
Re. Survivor
3rd Mar 2017 9:24pm
A sharp pang rattles my skull.
Voices begin to grow deafening.
Worry deepens the furrows in my brow.
Thoughts, here, are a dark plague.
I have chills! The images are so vivid. Amazing LG!
Voices begin to grow deafening.
Worry deepens the furrows in my brow.
Thoughts, here, are a dark plague.
I have chills! The images are so vivid. Amazing LG!
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Re. Survivor
11th Mar 2017 7:29pm
Re. Survivor
24th Mar 2017 10:12pm
Being alone in certain frames of mind can destroy us or help us find peace. I find we wrestle things we'd rather pretend didn't exist but it's the only way to really discover ourselves. You describe this struggle so perfectly.
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Re: Re. Survivor
25th Mar 2017 4:05am
Re. Survivor
Anonymous
25th Mar 2017 8:44pm
the things that will rattle us a lifetime. I really feel this. Good job
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Re: Re. Survivor
25th Mar 2017 9:06pm
Thank you kindly. My words are meant to be felt. At least, that's what I hope for. (;
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Re: Re. Survivor
17th Aug 2019 11:16pm
I remain unfound.
"Unhinged and free" (;
It's a wonderful feeling: the thought of a nervous breakdown.
Yours,
LostGirl
"Unhinged and free" (;
It's a wonderful feeling: the thought of a nervous breakdown.
Yours,
LostGirl
Re. Survivor
8th Oct 2019 11:25pm
Solitude allows us to be free as long as we don't overthink and damn do we overthink...I'm not sure if it's will to live or will to not die... excellent penning dear
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Re. Survivor
8th Oct 2019 11:54pm
Re. Survivor
9th Apr 2020 7:39pm
When in those quiet moments many thoughts enter the mind. Sometimes not able to allow us to find peace.
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Re. Survivor
25th Feb 2024 6:25pm