sunflower clouds

Poet likes this mucho

OxxO

thank you dearest Poet you brought me smiles :)

love Brenda

My Beautiful Brenda....this is stunning....that last line left me breathless....and the visuals which accompanied this ink were just as mesmerizing...

"& a star trailed blood across the night sky

while orchids pirouetted in the garden
at the sight of you"
~ incredible imagery lovely one

I love you so much

xoxo Taryn

thank you my beautiful one for embracing me and this quirky write..

I love you so much :)

xo Brenda

your hard jaw
that makes me weak
the gravel in your voice
brings angels to their knees

calls forth the demoness in me
I hiss a lullaby for the damned
cut out a piece of your heart
where it round my neck

WOWZERS!! *Raising hands in the air* Woot woot!! Those are some cutting edge stanzas right there, my friend!!

thank you Chad for your enthusiastic comment on this write bringing me smiles tonight :)

love Brenda

You know me, Brenda! I'm all about some smiles!

Captivating imagery; the way your words danced in every line. Last two stanzas were my fav.
Such a wonderful read Crim.

thank you lovely Rain so happy you enjoyed..

love Crim

Nice imagery and word play

thank you most kindly welcome to DU..

love Crim

Vivid fantastical fantasy...love it

thank you graciously Jasper..

love Crim

I believe you touched your lovely fingers to canvas and created a work of art with your words here, beautiful Brenda. The imagery was ethereal and surreal giving it a kiss of perfect mystery. Beautifully done, my lady ☺
Willow

thank you lovely Willow for such a beautiful comment :)

love Brenda

thank you most graciously lovely Amelia for such a wonderful comment..

love Crim

So loved the metamorphosis this poem worked itself into with your guiding fingertips.

thank you Jerry for taking this journey with me to a new dimension :)

love Brenda

it's a graceful poetic landscape, Crim,
& burns away some of the darkness...

thank you John it does indeed :)

love Crim

Delighted to see how your garden grows Crim!  This is magic, possibly written from a parallel dimension.  That guy seems a bit on the rough side though.  Take care!

thank you dearest Sir Crow aw i'll be fine after all i'm where there are sunflower clouds :)

love Crim

St 5 L 4 - Change the 'where' to 'wear' - this is the correct spelling for this line.  

My, the Goddess is doing the rounds this week isn't she. Good to see her popping up in other works recently. Maybe it's an epidemic. In the words of Willy Wonka "I hope it will last".  

Thanks for the read.

thank you Missy bejesus i'm goofy with my obvious errors lol.. yes the Goddess she pops up in my writing every now and then but this week you probably had a hand in her popping up in my poem :)

love Brenda

this is simply beautiful - the last stanza sounds like the real you, at least in my head it does :-)

lovely ink :-)

thank you David for seeing my inner beauty.. love Brenda

well i'm bloody dumbstruck o.O
fml this is pure beauty, Brenda
loved loved loved loveeeeeed!!!!!

thank you beautiful one smiling widely at you :) love Brenda

I felt that 'brighter' side peeking thru in this one, makes me smile that ur gonna make it :)

aw thank you dearest Poe :) love Crim

The imagery in this is sharp and effective; I'm especially fond of the star trailing blood. You create a real sense of a mythological place here, and the violence of the narrative is pure fairy tale gold. The only cliche is the hard jaw of the hero, but that's forgivable since this is a fairy tale, and the heroes of those do tend to have strong jaws! One of your best poems.

thank you graciously Jack means a lot coming from you :) love Brenda

This is such an excellent testimony unto the power of self within and beyond the tangible existence outside of it.

shut the door on what isn't
& in came the sun
as orchids pirouetted in the garden
at the sight of the Goddess within

What a fabulous ending, Brenda.

Well done.

thank you Sage one for bringing me smiles today :) love Brenda

Brenda.. this is beautiful.. i truly loved this.. love you..



Dave

aw thank you Dave :) love Brenda