SEVEN

Miss Jade.
Miss Jade.
Miss Jade.

Leave it to you to create such vivid imagery
amidst the rhyme & flow.
Very few poets can seize such a skill
and master it [the way you've done here].
I am in awe;)
~xo, Devlin

Darling Devlin, generous so,
I thank you from this humble soul
Who's grateful for your kind support
And touches pen to yours, salute.✒️

ever
Jade, ad infinitum xo

So dimly lit is room, your bed.
Yet see the hint,
My lover's rise of purple tint.

indeed, indeed, indeed,

your pen, your lance, that thrills with every stroke, with every veil, with every dance...

listing required!

*darkly smiles @ "listing required"*

Aah, you male minxie tomcat you, for your yowling embrace, and giving honor to my ode of veils.

-tiger queen🐾

The descriptors of the strip  produce an exquisite word play that lifts it above the genre of erotic. Quite honestly with the first reading I didn't even realize an undressing was going on until the mention of the "seven veils".

My thanks to you, Jazzmanor, for stopping by for a visit & the read, to share your thoughts which I found welcoming in their interests.

Impressive, Jade, beauty and elegance mixed with seductive passions.
A pleasure to read you...

Thank you, Kasai!  Coming from such a lovely person & beautiful poet, your appraisal & appreciation means a lot.

Finely constructed and disseminated - excellent Jade

Thank you, Whale sir, for your choice of words regarding mine.  Much humbled.

This is so delicately written for a sexual poem, your artful touch echoes classic poetry, but yet with a modern feel.......

Why thank you, poet comrade, for your feeling & supportive express on my tender ode..,  
and for an honored place in your Reading List.

I feel that the full stops on every line actually hinders the flow of the piece slightly. The thing is with full stops is that they can become a hindrance if overused. I also feel that there's a few examples of things in here rhyming for rhyming's sake. May be something to look at moving forward. This line made me giggle a little:

"A mauve of areola round.
Another pass,
The second cloud of heaven's mass"

i read all poems out loud, and with my English accent, I pronounce "Pass" as "parss" so I stumbled matching it up to "Mass" and found myself saying "marss".... OK, just a little giggle I was having with myself.

That aside, there are some select good images in here. "No deft mirage" and "whispered veil" are beautifully phrased. I enjoyed these little highlights.

Thank you for the read.

Hello, pagan sister Missy!  My thanks for your visit & comment.    
   
I stripped away most of the punctuation back to the way I originally wrote the piece because the way it's structured and each line begins with a capped letter signifies how each line flows into the next till the end.  I actually have preferred punctuation in the most minimalist of ways.  As for rhyme for rhyme's sake, I know what you mean, however, I don't try to "shoehorn" words to stick to a rhyme scheme (which in this case was the 2nd/3rd lines of each stanza).  I'd drop the notion if I saw it wasn't working.  Now when it comes to "pass" I was implying another veil pulled away.  And with "mass" I implied the other breast revealed.  Not my finest hour but I'm always revising things, especially my newer ink, as I return from time to time for a fresh read & perspective so perhaps a better set of words might come to me sooner or later, but never forced.  
   
I think that covers your suggestions.  I'll note you my reply as well just in case.    
   
Be well,    
ever    
Jade🌾