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Echoes Of Silence
We slept through it all, Route 66
coiled, dormant, tempered with sufferings
footsteps to Dead can dance.
The desert reflected: burnt-ginger, amber
spellbound primordial idle tamed of land
soaking mists, fiddle-necks swayed on
sepia lines over’n beyond rippled sand-
dust'd ant hills, abandoned defying gravity.
Chaparral Yuccas and Pencil Chollas
ghostly witnesses to silver-tongue’d moth
circling halcyon light. Manzanitas bowed
monotony of breathing as last breath
trundled from quartzstones, seeking
secrets from ocher plateau..winked.
Somewhere we heard roar of distant shores
lacing wounds, receding in untamed belief.
Visions transfixed towards fireflies whirled
lit in brevity; promise of a new dawn.
Another heaven, another sphere
veils of skin shrouded wizened totem
clenched fists, tumbleweeds
crushed petals of Sacred Datura.
We laid there, trice in truce
restlessness in loins
listening
ears to earth, mouth to wind
only silence echoed in infinity.
Comp: Infinity
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Re. Echoes Of Silence
12th Jan 2017 6:20am
Adore this piece, Vee. Incredible imagery, simply gorgeous. Talented piece of writing.
Good luck on the comp!
~anonshadow😏
Good luck on the comp!
~anonshadow😏
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12th Jan 2017 4:58pm
I could've written on just about anything that symbolized infinity but driving across the states and massive amount of lands and just before i got to my so called 'paradise' i went through a surreal experience that seemed like time was at standstill and the earth didn't have corners or ledge...it was easy to write, since i lived through miles and miles of the endless desert.
Thank you Anon for feeling this piece.
Thank you Anon for feeling this piece.
Re. Echoes Of Silence
12th Jan 2017 1:23pm
Rina, Your use of the desert plant life for me completes this marvelous portrait. I can hear whispers from the landscape testifying of what there occurred. I identify with this passage,
"Manzanitas bowed
monotony of breathing as last breath "
The manzanita is a magical symbol of my childhood and the idea of its bowing resonates with the way, I sometimes, become tired of this existence. Bravisima!
"Manzanitas bowed
monotony of breathing as last breath "
The manzanita is a magical symbol of my childhood and the idea of its bowing resonates with the way, I sometimes, become tired of this existence. Bravisima!
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12th Jan 2017 5:03pm
GW, you witnessed how this piece sort of evolved and transformed and you were right, the vision i had in my mind were too vivid and precise but perhaps next time...:)
Thank you for being in the corner of my visual and i'm so glad you found something in here that was relatable.
Thank you for being in the corner of my visual and i'm so glad you found something in here that was relatable.
Re. Echoes Of Silence
12th Jan 2017 7:05pm
"The desert reflected: burnt-ginger, amber
spellbound primordial idle tamed of land
soaking mists, fiddle-necks swayed on
sepia lines over’n beyond rippled sand-
dust'd ant hills, abandoned defying gravity" <-- My God, woman!!!
The way you played with your words and manipulated them to bend at your will, was nothing short of masterful! Just a beautiful flow and fascinating imagery, Vee! :)
spellbound primordial idle tamed of land
soaking mists, fiddle-necks swayed on
sepia lines over’n beyond rippled sand-
dust'd ant hills, abandoned defying gravity" <-- My God, woman!!!
The way you played with your words and manipulated them to bend at your will, was nothing short of masterful! Just a beautiful flow and fascinating imagery, Vee! :)
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:)..... 'it is not the spoon that bends but it is yourself' i couldn't help but think of that quote from the movie Matrix lol
It's one of my favorite things in poetry when it happens naturally and lately its something that comes easily to me it seems, words and sounds bend and shape to something different than the norm.
I"m so glad you liked this Rain, its someplace i'd love to re-visit but i know i wouldn't like to anytime soon, its here in my poetry captured.
It's one of my favorite things in poetry when it happens naturally and lately its something that comes easily to me it seems, words and sounds bend and shape to something different than the norm.
I"m so glad you liked this Rain, its someplace i'd love to re-visit but i know i wouldn't like to anytime soon, its here in my poetry captured.
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12th Jan 2017 7:33pm
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12th Jan 2017 11:27pm
Re. Echoes Of Silence
13th Jan 2017 7:32am
vast wasteland, brilliantly detailed.
enraptured travelers, alone yet not;
centuries of ghostly eyes...
enraptured travelers, alone yet not;
centuries of ghostly eyes...
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Re: Re. Echoes Of Silence
15th Jan 2017 1:29am
I lived in the same town as you John for number of years and made the journey numerous times back and forth, but this last time i was ready mentally and emotionally to appreciate the vastness and feel the brutality of the beauty.
We (humans) think we've tamed the land but we're not even close.
We (humans) think we've tamed the land but we're not even close.
Re. Echoes Of Silence
13th Jan 2017 12:47pm
This put me in the mindset of those..."peace, love n happiness" days...had me wantin to burn a fatty n listen to some Bob Dylan, n Earth Wind & Fire! lol... Excellent language n imagery throughout :)
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awhile back i read a book by T. C. Boyle called Drop City on commune love & peace..there's somewhat of an influence of that book in this poem which your acute senses detected..all i can say is when you want to go there hit me up and i'll join lol
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3rd Feb 2017 10:25am
Re. Echoes Of Silence
14th Jan 2017 00:57am
and somehow you knew I'd love it too!
now ..thanks for messing up my bucket list....!!
beautiful, gorgeous and surreal...the depiction of the desert and the delivery of the poem. 'Wonder'ful write indeed!! straight to RL!
Thank you Rina!
now ..thanks for messing up my bucket list....!!
beautiful, gorgeous and surreal...the depiction of the desert and the delivery of the poem. 'Wonder'ful write indeed!! straight to RL!
Thank you Rina!
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Re: Re. Echoes Of Silence
3rd Feb 2017 1:02am
The question is not making it to an RL but staying in RL lol, there's such great wonderful works out there that to make it to a list is an honor and highly rewarding, thanks a bunch Kd :)
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14th Jan 2017 4:20am
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3rd Feb 2017 00:57am
Jeje, so good to see your comment and knowing you've enjoyed this, thank you so much.
Re. Echoes Of Silence
14th Jan 2017 8:55am
The mysticism of that journey through New Mexico and Arizona I thought inexplicable but you've captured it here - we were chased by ghosts through the snow mountains after finding a spirit catcher in our hired corvette - saved by the desert
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Re: Re. Echoes Of Silence
3rd Feb 2017 00:19am
I had Jim Morrison's poetry book next to me during that journey and seeing what he had seen gave me more of an insight and appreciation to his words, although no one could 'paint' the desert like he did. Hopefully in some humble way i captured it here, thank you Whale.
Re. Echoes Of Silence
2nd Feb 2017 4:11pm
The imagery divine...you reeled me in with rt 66(traveled parts quite often) and I stay for the resplendent ride...lovely poet
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Thank you very much JT, especially knowing that you've experienced the travel on that route, makes me appreciate your comment even more.