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This was breathtaking, John:
'I would have bequeathed to her my exquisite heart
but for the lack of a word: stay'

I can almost hear it, spoken on the wind
And it is beautiful....

Gosh my Sir,darling.. .this achy,
haunting and honest..as only
you know how to do it..

gosh damn it and that end.. that
end hold our breaths hostage.



-Howlinsg

this makes me
ache
something fierce
xo

Your words always paint a vibrant image "the city was mitochondrial but for she
it was neither remarkable, nor Verona "love the word mitochondrial here and how it instantly made me think of a city abuzz with chaotic energy circling a focal point..the calm that caught his eye..the center of the storm

Fav line:
"I would have bequeathed to her my exquisite heart
but for the lack of a word: stay " ahh exqusite

Ah damn. The sad essence of this is that she may have been waiting for the same from you. And in neither of you speaking it, it was lost for this lifetime. Maybe in the next you'll know.

This has a heavy Hemingway feel to me, a deep sadness of discontent amid acceptance.

Amazing write Jon. How you come up with such ideas and wordings. I wonder sometimes

The seemingly "rushed" nature of a poem like this - the intermittent use of ampersands, the many commas delineating clauses and images - make it seem like scribbles in a notebook, perhaps in a cafe somewhere, which adds to the Romantic atmosphere. It took me a moment to realise that each couplet is self-contained, because without full stops I would read the first line of the next couplet as a continuation of the second line of the previous couplet. That said, I corrected myself and got into the groove of the poem fairly quickly, and I don't think that you should add full stops, because they'd only interfere with that deliciously "rushed" quality.

P.S: Women aren't my preference, sexually, but the one in the picture accompanying this poem has a very delectable behind... I do hope your work isn't straightening me out!

John, you know I usually select one passage or line as a fav...here I cannot...it aches and your last couplet, well,...yeah maybe that could've been the one to do me in...exceptional as always....With love, always - Kitten xoxo

This has good style with a readability, nice mystery, and delicate allusions; it's enjoyable to read....