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Raining Blood
Wine and sangria fill the sky
Plagued by slow death and immense decay
Falling down upon resilient soldiers
Coating the earth in a layer of thick garnet day- to- day
In preference to rain drops plummeting
And providing showers that cleanse
With a blade’s edge, warriors are stripped of life
A mere casualty through war’s lens
Bodies derelict, left to deteriorate throughout the night
In agonized misery, they lay in waiting of rigor mortis
Souls mingling with the gray area of the afterlife
Leaving behind not taciturn but lifeless corpses
Blades collide, slice flesh, and meet bone
As skirmishes take place around the vanguard
One side is destined to gain the victory
But rich crimson continues to rain down in blatant disregard
*I may end up deleting this account with DUP and return with a new account. I am not very active as I once was, and I feel like a new account would be better.
Plagued by slow death and immense decay
Falling down upon resilient soldiers
Coating the earth in a layer of thick garnet day- to- day
In preference to rain drops plummeting
And providing showers that cleanse
With a blade’s edge, warriors are stripped of life
A mere casualty through war’s lens
Bodies derelict, left to deteriorate throughout the night
In agonized misery, they lay in waiting of rigor mortis
Souls mingling with the gray area of the afterlife
Leaving behind not taciturn but lifeless corpses
Blades collide, slice flesh, and meet bone
As skirmishes take place around the vanguard
One side is destined to gain the victory
But rich crimson continues to rain down in blatant disregard
*I may end up deleting this account with DUP and return with a new account. I am not very active as I once was, and I feel like a new account would be better.
Published 5th Jan 2017
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5th Jan 2017 3:02am
I for one hope you do not delete anything. I like your old poems, have them on my reading list to go back and read from time to time. Poetry should be preserved, not deleted...
Having said that, this is a very bloody poem of wars from days gone by. Much interesting, graphic imagery painted with a brush dripping with crimson rain...
A gripping read!
JJ
Having said that, this is a very bloody poem of wars from days gone by. Much interesting, graphic imagery painted with a brush dripping with crimson rain...
A gripping read!
JJ
8th Jan 2017 1:07am
I suppose that, because both you and Rain seem to think it would be a bad idea to delete my account (I personally just hate my username and want to change it to match my username everywhere else... Which would be either Poetofthedawn12 or Yourfellowmetalhead). I would consider uploading some older poems, but I don't know.
Glad to know you still like and approve of my pieces, JJ. I still pick up your books from time to time when I find downtime and read through them.
Glad to know you still like and approve of my pieces, JJ. I still pick up your books from time to time when I find downtime and read through them.
8th Jan 2017 4:34am
Somehow, knowing you read my books gives me comfort, a sense of immortality, at least as long as you are still alive and reading... thank you Jess!
JJ
JJ
5th Jan 2017 5:32pm
Darlin' Dawn, I knew from the first two lines that this was going to be an amazing read. You've always had an uncanny ability to captivate me with your opening stanza and steal my attention throughout. Don't think I remember reading edgy and semi-dark ink from you and I gotta' tell ya', I LoVeD it! Beautifully done! I have missed your beautiful ink! xoxo
*about deleting your account, I agree with JJ for the most part. Check inbox*
*about deleting your account, I agree with JJ for the most part. Check inbox*
8th Jan 2017 1:09am
Awe thank you, Dearie! I love getting comments from you. You and JJ are two of my favorite people on DUP (and the biggest reason why I want to stay on this site and continue to write when I find the time).
I shall check my inbox and reply now. (Sorry it took so long!)
Merry Cheers!!!
I shall check my inbox and reply now. (Sorry it took so long!)
Merry Cheers!!!
10th Jul 2019 1:29am
Effective dystopian imagery throughout, so I think it's well inked. If I were to critique anything, my personal bent is to compose in free form. Many wonderful writes display much skill in the use of form, but honest emotion flows more organically through fluid thought and skill can be just as evident in free form. In my writings, I keep rhymes sparse, for impact and often there is a lot of alliteration. I cannot say I use or employ alliteration because it just occurs naturally, but there is a subtle subliminal quality to it.
