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Feed your dreams
Separation of expectation
from reality,
Otherwise, face ego’s fatality
Do you see how I feed my dreams?
Discipline opposed to indecision
Listen,
Otherwise, face a faceless vision
Dream the means to feed your dreams!
Adapt, improvise and overcome
Run,
Otherwise, come undone
I’ve schemed themes for my dreams!
No time for a blind mind’s eye
Follow my rhyme,
Otherwise, sit still, confined
Leaves blossom on the trees in my dreams!
No fear, failure is nourishment
A psychological supplement
A tool for your mind, intent to augment
Dream the dream of your dreams!
from reality,
Otherwise, face ego’s fatality
Do you see how I feed my dreams?
Discipline opposed to indecision
Listen,
Otherwise, face a faceless vision
Dream the means to feed your dreams!
Adapt, improvise and overcome
Run,
Otherwise, come undone
I’ve schemed themes for my dreams!
No time for a blind mind’s eye
Follow my rhyme,
Otherwise, sit still, confined
Leaves blossom on the trees in my dreams!
No fear, failure is nourishment
A psychological supplement
A tool for your mind, intent to augment
Dream the dream of your dreams!
Published 21st Dec 2016
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21st Dec 2016 10:56pm
I need harsh criticism.
No joke.
I'm afraid that I'm beating a dead horse here.
No joke.
I'm afraid that I'm beating a dead horse here.
22nd Dec 2016 6:45am
aw Chaotic one while it is different for you it is wonderful.. in it's encouraging voice.. admonishing me and others to seize our dreams..in that it's beautiful.. I don't have any harsh critique for you because I think the message is perfect..
love Crim
love Crim
22nd Dec 2016 12:39pm
That's perfectly sweet, Crim! Thank you so much. I may touch it up a bit, or may not. Lol. It's rare for me to do so with my work. Probably should, though. :p
Anonymous
22nd Dec 2016 5:54pm
I almost want to say "Amen".
Again ... almost;)
22nd Dec 2016 9:22pm
26th Dec 2016 8:05pm
There's nothing wrong with the message/word choice/rhyme scheme one thing I would suggest would be instead of having the entire poem italicized, just use the italics to emphasize the stand alone lines
19xx
19xx
27th Dec 2016 4:58am
2nd Jan 2017 4:49am
No harsh criticism... the sound, rhyme/near rhyme in this one is stunning, as is the message!
Great write, my friend
Great write, my friend
