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Forever Greater
The need for you is dire
You are my sole desire
My hearts fire
Rising higher
And higher
This love is not a liar
But a fighter
Growing brighter
By our internal lighter
Burning forever greater
You are my sole desire
My hearts fire
Rising higher
And higher
This love is not a liar
But a fighter
Growing brighter
By our internal lighter
Burning forever greater
Published 15th Dec 2016
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16th Dec 2016 00:00am
17th Dec 2016 10:49am
3rd Aug 2017 4:31am
It's a pleasant poem to read and a joy to reread. I'd suggest placing a ' in heart(')s to show that its ones heart on fire. At least that is what I though was the point, unless it was that multiple are on fire. Loved it though, from beginning to end. Keep writing more!
Thank you very much for the read and comment 😊 as for the '
We all have a fire in our heart I simply phrased it as such that it's my hearts fire. Thank you for your critiquing I really appreciate it.
We all have a fire in our heart I simply phrased it as such that it's my hearts fire. Thank you for your critiquing I really appreciate it.
