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DREAMSCAPE : FLIES
Consummation
They rape the willing
Flesh and vomit
In ecstasy
W
My friends are flies
They mold, they shed
Devoured, eaten
Now teeth and claws
Wa
I drift into space
I watch them burn
Screeching
For me
Wak
The flies enter me
Blades shimmering
I kill them and laugh
They fear me
Wake
I hunger as they
Hungered
I chew and swallow
Their scales
Wake u
My heart stops beating
Venom inside
Expelled from me
Stains the floor
Wake up
I scream as tendrils
Escape from my pores
I see all colours
And all is grey
Wake
Up
Now
Don’t run
Don’t even move
I’ll find you
Anyway
Published 2nd Dec 2016
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3rd Dec 2016 6:52am
I will never look at flies the same again! Lol.
Brilliant write, paints a gross vivid picture and I love the wake up steps!
Brilliant write, paints a gross vivid picture and I love the wake up steps!
4th Dec 2016 7:22am
What a darkly stunning picture this paints. Cleverly written with vivid descriptions and interesting artwork...
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6th Dec 2016 2:08am
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Anonymous
11th Dec 2016 5:42pm
I love the concept, the slow built with each verse, and the imagery is very original and unique, needless to say i really enjoyed the conscise form. I'm on the fence though with the little hints you left in between verses leading to 'wake up now' , as much as i firmly believe in artistic freedom of expression, i also equally believe in show and not tell.
Nevertheless, it's a very well written work.
Nevertheless, it's a very well written work.
11th Dec 2016 5:52pm
Thank you for the genuine comment Vee. I was at odds with it myself, but it felt right. It is something new I tried, because I actually wrote this based on a dream. Those cues symbolize the slow awakening process, where, at first, you don't understand that you're trying to wake up, all the way until it is screaming at you. I really do appreciate the constructive criticism though, it's refreshing.
~ UV
~ UV
18th Jan 2023 7:53am
