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Orion & Merope
To breathe the curve and then the coil,
The bulge of arm, the pull and spoil.
He levels arrow true in place
As muscles flex in rhythmic grace.
The tune and sinew of his bow
When how at last he lets it go
Towards rearing Horse Head nebulae
While I in awe as missile flees.
He ne'er gives me a single glance
Yet do I mind in spite the trance,
It is for me that he aims high
To stay the target his first try.
With stars that set himself ablaze,
What legend brands his epic phase
And claims the prize with self-same mark.
While 'twixt the galaxies we spark.
Photo: NASA public domain
The bulge of arm, the pull and spoil.
He levels arrow true in place
As muscles flex in rhythmic grace.
The tune and sinew of his bow
When how at last he lets it go
Towards rearing Horse Head nebulae
While I in awe as missile flees.
He ne'er gives me a single glance
Yet do I mind in spite the trance,
It is for me that he aims high
To stay the target his first try.
With stars that set himself ablaze,
What legend brands his epic phase
And claims the prize with self-same mark.
While 'twixt the galaxies we spark.
Photo: NASA public domain
Published 2nd Dec 2016
| Edited 3rd Dec 2016
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I do love the Sagittarius moon (or do I equate the after effects of), and you've done so beautifully with this, Jade. I love the terminology and celestial references that point the arrow to personal feelings and endless adventure.
Ah dear Ahavati, your words, your insight, everything as a gift so fulfilling to my existence as a poet. And giving my humble ode a place of honor on your list sends me over the moon...
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2nd Dec 2016 6:40am
Orion is the first constellation I could identity in the night sky... I truly enjoyed you ode to the celestial keepers....
Tommy
Tommy
tomcat, I love the missive you sent earlier about your Orion sighting in the glorious clear late autumn's evening sky, how wonderful. And I'm so pleased for your enjoyment of the piece!
-Jadey💫
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-Jadey💫
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2nd Dec 2016 8:19am
This is a skillful and elegant piece, I am actually quite fond of anything that has to do with space. You captured the very essence of that love beautifully. Adding to RL as well.
I'm grateful for the recommend.
I'm glad to know we share a similar interest in everything to do with the universe which was my first passion as a child (before I could read).
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I'm glad to know we share a similar interest in everything to do with the universe which was my first passion as a child (before I could read).
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2nd Dec 2016 6:40pm
This is totally off base, pun intended, but as I was looking at the picture, I saw a pitcher... a left-handed pitcher who looks kinda like the Met's Jacob deGrom with his hair swirling, taking aim at homeplate. The ball is clearly in his left hand with a glove on his right hand and his eyes glaring in at the batter. His baseball cap is slightly askew from the fierceness of his pitching motion augment the blue and kinda orange hue of his uniform and cap... ahh, I love baseball all year long...
Having said that, i enjoyed your vision of he heavens and appreciate your celestial imagery!
Great poem Jade!
JJ
Having said that, i enjoyed your vision of he heavens and appreciate your celestial imagery!
Great poem Jade!
JJ
3rd Dec 2016 8:13am
Hi Joe! Ah yes, I know well your love of baseball, heehee😉, so I wasn't surprised by the analogy as I audibly giggled.😋
But I'm delighted that you like my piece! ~~Jadey💫
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But I'm delighted that you like my piece! ~~Jadey💫
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3rd Dec 2016 9:24am
Really amazing poetry, Jade, and that photo is breathtaking.
The love of Orion and Merope, beautifully written...
The love of Orion and Merope, beautifully written...
Dear Kasai, this is a treat to have you here for a visit, and gifting me such kind support!
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3rd Dec 2016 9:48pm
I wish I lived in an area conducive to stargazing. Too many city lights around here. I love your write about the great stellar huntsman, and his love waiting twixt the galaxies.
4th Dec 2016 9:53pm
Ah yes. I remember from my childhood when my parents would take my sisters & I to the high deserts in Antelope Valley in the evening, and into the night we'd all venture out into poppy fields and star-gaze up at the giant atrium of constellations and literally clouds of an arm from the Milky Way. It was glorious!
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1st Jan 2017 8:30pm
Congratulations! This poem has been nominated for Deep Underground Poetry's Featured Poem of the Month Competition. You may view the nomination at the link below, and will be notified if selected.
Best of Luck and thank you for being a member of the Deep Side!
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/9339/
Best of Luck and thank you for being a member of the Deep Side!
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/9339/
1st Jan 2017 10:14pm
I bow to the honor of having something of mine considered & included.
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