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insurrection
Under suspension
Inner redemption
coincidence
Unknown penalty
everything' s relative
I'm evidence
You make old habbits look nice
you build unusual vice
you're insatiable
A piece of a mirror is reflecting
my ego is shimmering painted
undeniable
Are you searching for a brand new wound?
Are you still ignorant of what you want?
What a demonstration!
Asking for one last chance ...
You take it - you're selling it back
Insurrection
Inner redemption
coincidence
Unknown penalty
everything' s relative
I'm evidence
You make old habbits look nice
you build unusual vice
you're insatiable
A piece of a mirror is reflecting
my ego is shimmering painted
undeniable
Are you searching for a brand new wound?
Are you still ignorant of what you want?
What a demonstration!
Asking for one last chance ...
You take it - you're selling it back
Insurrection
Published 18th Nov 2016
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18th Nov 2016 2:23pm
18th Nov 2016 1:08pm
Hello My Non Grata Friend
I cleaned up some syntax and spelling for you, where I changed anything I used (brackets) so you could see where easily.
Under suspension
inner (redemption)
(coincidence)
Unknown penalty
(everything's) relative
I'm evidence
(Making) old (habits) look (good) --> see notes
you build unusual vice
you're insatiable
(A mirror reflects)
my ego in (undeniable)
(shimmering paint)
Are you (searching for a new) wound?
Are you still ignorant of what you want?
What a demonstration!
Asking for one last chance ...
you take it - you're selling back
insurrection
Note..
Do you mean "habits"? ( something that repeats) or do you mean "evils"? ( bad things)
Thanx for the read rockstar!
Al
I cleaned up some syntax and spelling for you, where I changed anything I used (brackets) so you could see where easily.
Under suspension
inner (redemption)
(coincidence)
Unknown penalty
(everything's) relative
I'm evidence
(Making) old (habits) look (good) --> see notes
you build unusual vice
you're insatiable
(A mirror reflects)
my ego in (undeniable)
(shimmering paint)
Are you (searching for a new) wound?
Are you still ignorant of what you want?
What a demonstration!
Asking for one last chance ...
you take it - you're selling back
insurrection
Note..
Do you mean "habits"? ( something that repeats) or do you mean "evils"? ( bad things)
Thanx for the read rockstar!
Al
18th Nov 2016 2:22pm
oh my savor thanks again
did the typos-I was like speeding this morning!
I didn't change the other verse though I m confused
do you mean it doesn't make sense?
did the typos-I was like speeding this morning!
I didn't change the other verse though I m confused
do you mean it doesn't make sense?
