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Underwater World
we find each other in sea spells
in waves of wishes and whispers
in our sensuous underwater world
where we play in pearlescent aqua
dancing together as mer lovers do
within shades of jade and azure
hungry lips kiss in divine bliss
as longing arms find heaven
spiralling upward in desire
our tails entwined forever
the corals dance tenderly
mirror a rhythm of rapture
we let our spirits drift away
losing ourselves in turquoise
flocks of sea butterflies flutter by
the dolphins cry a mystifying hymn
while we swim and submerge in lust
our souls set free in the realm of sea
releasing everything we used to be
in the depths of the aquamarine
in waves of wishes and whispers
in our sensuous underwater world
where we play in pearlescent aqua
dancing together as mer lovers do
within shades of jade and azure
hungry lips kiss in divine bliss
as longing arms find heaven
spiralling upward in desire
our tails entwined forever
the corals dance tenderly
mirror a rhythm of rapture
we let our spirits drift away
losing ourselves in turquoise
flocks of sea butterflies flutter by
the dolphins cry a mystifying hymn
while we swim and submerge in lust
our souls set free in the realm of sea
releasing everything we used to be
in the depths of the aquamarine
Published 10th Nov 2016
| Edited 3rd Dec 2024
Author's Note
Heather N - Like Lovers Do.
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10th Nov 2016 7:17pm
Underwater silken slide and kisses...so sensuous. Breathtaking, Duende! Absolutely beautiful... :)
Willow
Willow
10th Nov 2016 7:25pm
Thank you so much, Willow!
You made me smile big time with your comment :-)
I really appreciate your visit and your wonderful words!
You made me smile big time with your comment :-)
I really appreciate your visit and your wonderful words!
10th Nov 2016 7:45pm
I can't help but think of the Jimi Hendrix song "A Merman I Shall Turn To Be." I love this aquatic fantasy, dreaming of underwater delights. My favorite lines:
we let our spirits drift away
losing ourselves in turquoise
Beautifully visualized with a spiritual undercurrent. Fine job!
we let our spirits drift away
losing ourselves in turquoise
Beautifully visualized with a spiritual undercurrent. Fine job!
Thank you so much for your comment and for mentioning that song...
I love Jimi Hendrix, but didn't know it? Great song!
You made me smile by highlighting those lines!
At the end of the editing process I removed two lines I didn't like and replaced them with these, because I wanted turquoise (my favorite color) in the poem :-)
I really appreciate your support and words!
I love Jimi Hendrix, but didn't know it? Great song!
You made me smile by highlighting those lines!
At the end of the editing process I removed two lines I didn't like and replaced them with these, because I wanted turquoise (my favorite color) in the poem :-)
I really appreciate your support and words!
10th Nov 2016 7:51pm
I love how loving, happy, and upbeat this poem is. You tell a wonderful imaginative story.
I'm thinking this is my favorite from you 😁
P.S. Nice shape 😉
I'm thinking this is my favorite from you 😁
P.S. Nice shape 😉
It could be my favorite as well :-)
Thank you so much for your comment, I'm so happy to hear you love this one!
I really appreciate your support and words, dear DC!
Thank you so much for your comment, I'm so happy to hear you love this one!
I really appreciate your support and words, dear DC!
Anonymous
11th Nov 2016 00:43am
Hey Duende.......what a magical write......really enjoyed this......good luck in the comp......purple luv & hugs xo :)
Hey flowergirl, thank you so much for your comment!
I'm glad to hear you enjoyed this one! I was trying to make it as magical as possible, so I'm really happy that you call this a magical write... you brought a smile to my face :-)
Love, Duende
I'm glad to hear you enjoyed this one! I was trying to make it as magical as possible, so I'm really happy that you call this a magical write... you brought a smile to my face :-)
Love, Duende
Anonymous
- Edited 11th Nov 2016 6:25am
11th Nov 2016 5:21am
You made me feel your majical being,
can see her vividly
I love this beautiful one
Good Luck!
can see her vividly
I love this beautiful one
Good Luck!
11th Nov 2016 6:11am
Your comment made me smile :-)
I'm so happy you love this one and could feel the magic!
I really appreciate your visists and words, dear!
I'm so happy you love this one and could feel the magic!
I really appreciate your visists and words, dear!
Anonymous
- Edited 27th Dec 2019 12:45pm
11th Nov 2016 9:06am
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Wow... that's an amazing compliment!
Thank you so much, Aemelia!
You made me smile by mentioning the last two stanzas... I wrote them first (and then the first two and after that the rest) It's not that I have a connection with the underwater world (though my real name means Pearl) but I was always fascinated by everything magical and mystical, so this competition really spoke to me :-)
I really appreciate your visit and comment!
Thank you so much, Aemelia!
You made me smile by mentioning the last two stanzas... I wrote them first (and then the first two and after that the rest) It's not that I have a connection with the underwater world (though my real name means Pearl) but I was always fascinated by everything magical and mystical, so this competition really spoke to me :-)
I really appreciate your visit and comment!
11th Nov 2016 11:42am
sensual passages in that quiet world,
interrupted only by the melodies of the dolphins...
interrupted only by the melodies of the dolphins...
11th Nov 2016 11:56am
Thank you so much for your comment, John!
Great to hear you enjoyed the sensuality... it was a pleasure writing this one :-)
Great to hear you enjoyed the sensuality... it was a pleasure writing this one :-)
11th Nov 2016 6:37pm
This is such a beautifully written piece. This is by far one of my favorites of yours. I was captivated and I hope that you win. The colors and imagery really come to life.
Wow... that's such an amazing compliment, thank you so much!
Captivated... I can't ask for more!
This is one my favorites as well, so you make me smile big time :-)
I really appreciate your visit and comment, Eswaller!
Captivated... I can't ask for more!
This is one my favorites as well, so you make me smile big time :-)
I really appreciate your visit and comment, Eswaller!
11th Nov 2016 9:13pm
13th Nov 2016 3:25am
Thank you so much for your comment!
Great to hear you enjoyed this one... it was a pleasure writing :-)
Great to hear you enjoyed this one... it was a pleasure writing :-)
13th Nov 2016 2:33am
wow this is very beautifull.
i loved how you shaped the poem in that perfect shape, and how the readings flows in that perfect poem.
@)-'-,--
i loved how you shaped the poem in that perfect shape, and how the readings flows in that perfect poem.
@)-'-,--
13th Nov 2016 3:28am
What a surprise to see you on my page :-)
Thank you so much for your amazing comment!
Calling this a perfect poem means a lot to me, I really appreciate your words!
Thank you so much for your amazing comment!
Calling this a perfect poem means a lot to me, I really appreciate your words!
Anonymous
- Edited 13th Nov 2016 4:05pm
13th Nov 2016 4:03pm
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You love to eat that line? Haha, you made me smile big time :-)
Great to hear you love the picture, I doubted between that one and another...
Thank you so much for your comment, Boian!
Great to hear you love the picture, I doubted between that one and another...
Thank you so much for your comment, Boian!
13th Nov 2016 5:27pm
Oh the confluence of alliteration here is astounding!! This reads like a beautiful rolling wave! And, hot too! There's something mysterious and sexy about mermaids.
13th Nov 2016 5:46pm
Thank you so much for another amazing comment!
I love this poem, so I embrace every comment she receives :-)
My work is really diverse and sometimes I try to focus on alliteration, sound, flow (not that good with terminology) so I appreciate it a lot that you mention that, thank you!
I love this poem, so I embrace every comment she receives :-)
My work is really diverse and sometimes I try to focus on alliteration, sound, flow (not that good with terminology) so I appreciate it a lot that you mention that, thank you!
13th Nov 2016 6:05pm
Anonymous
- Edited 29th Nov 2016 3:47pm
29th Nov 2016 3:21pm
ooohhhh...to think i almost i missed out on this?!..
thanks for mentioning this Duende...
lotsa metaphorical morsels you got here..
'we find each other in sea spells
in waves of wishes and whispers '
'the corals dance tenderly
mirror a rhythm of rapture '
'flocks of sea butterflies flutter by
the dolphins cry a mystifying hymn '
sea butterflies flutter by...sigh***
love that original play on words..
what i also dig is your overt/covert use of colors
graciously spaced throughout this gem
jade,azure,turquoise,aquamarine..
what a subtle yet sensual marination
of deep sea hues painted with such
delicate strokes..
this was one helluva entry for
Jade's comp
thanks for mentioning this Duende...
lotsa metaphorical morsels you got here..
'we find each other in sea spells
in waves of wishes and whispers '
'the corals dance tenderly
mirror a rhythm of rapture '
'flocks of sea butterflies flutter by
the dolphins cry a mystifying hymn '
sea butterflies flutter by...sigh***
love that original play on words..
what i also dig is your overt/covert use of colors
graciously spaced throughout this gem
jade,azure,turquoise,aquamarine..
what a subtle yet sensual marination
of deep sea hues painted with such
delicate strokes..
this was one helluva entry for
Jade's comp
You're welcome!
When I released this poem I though 'if someone is gonna love it, it's Naajir' so I was a bit surprised to not find your comment and I'm glad I decided to mention it!
You make me smile by mentioning the 'sea butterlies' stanza, because that is one of my favorites, together with the 'mirror a rhythm of rapture'
I'm also very delighted that you mention the use of colours! I did that for the first time in Indigo and I knew I wanted to write another colour poem one day...
I can't thank you enough for this very complimentary comment :-)
When I released this poem I though 'if someone is gonna love it, it's Naajir' so I was a bit surprised to not find your comment and I'm glad I decided to mention it!
You make me smile by mentioning the 'sea butterlies' stanza, because that is one of my favorites, together with the 'mirror a rhythm of rapture'
I'm also very delighted that you mention the use of colours! I did that for the first time in Indigo and I knew I wanted to write another colour poem one day...
I can't thank you enough for this very complimentary comment :-)
30th Apr 2017 2:06pm
"
hungry lips kiss in divine bliss
as longing arms find heaven
spiralling upward in desire
our tails entwined forever
the corals dance tenderly
mirror a rhythm of rapture
we let our spirits drift away
losing ourselves in turquoise"
Those lines give me the urge to float away in your passion and releasing into your lust... beautiful my dear
hungry lips kiss in divine bliss
as longing arms find heaven
spiralling upward in desire
our tails entwined forever
the corals dance tenderly
mirror a rhythm of rapture
we let our spirits drift away
losing ourselves in turquoise"
Those lines give me the urge to float away in your passion and releasing into your lust... beautiful my dear
2nd May 2017 5:27am
Thank you so much, Tim! This is one of my favorite poems, so I'm happy it caught your attention :-)
8th Mar 2024 1:23pm
