Underwater World

Underwater silken slide and kisses...so sensuous.  Breathtaking, Duende!  Absolutely beautiful...  :)
Willow

Thank you so much, Willow!

You made me smile big time with your comment :-)
I really appreciate your visit and your wonderful words!

I can't help but think of the Jimi Hendrix song "A Merman I Shall Turn To Be."  I love this aquatic fantasy, dreaming of underwater delights.  My favorite lines:

we let our spirits drift away    
losing ourselves in turquoise    

Beautifully visualized with a spiritual undercurrent.  Fine job!  

Thank you so much for your comment and for mentioning that song...  
I love Jimi Hendrix, but didn't know it? Great song!    
   
You made me smile by highlighting those lines!  
At the end of the editing process I removed two lines I didn't like and replaced them with these, because I wanted turquoise (my favorite color) in the poem :-)    
   
I really appreciate your support and words!

I love how loving, happy, and upbeat this poem is. You tell a wonderful imaginative story.
I'm thinking this is my favorite from you 😁

P.S. Nice shape 😉

It could be my favorite as well :-)    
   
Thank you so much for your comment, I'm so happy to hear you love this one!    
   
I really appreciate your support and words, dear DC!

Hey Duende.......what a magical write......really enjoyed this......good luck in the comp......purple luv & hugs xo :)

Hey flowergirl, thank you so much for your comment!  
 
I'm glad to hear you enjoyed this one! I was trying to make it as magical as possible, so I'm really happy that you call this a magical write... you brought a smile to my face :-)
 
Love, Duende

You made me feel your majical being,  
can see her vividly  
   
I love this beautiful one  
 
 
Good Luck!

Your comment made me smile :-)

I'm so happy you love this one and could feel the magic!

I really appreciate your visists and words, dear!

Wow... that's an amazing compliment!  
Thank you so much, Aemelia!  
 
You made me smile by mentioning the last two stanzas... I wrote them first (and then the first two and after that the rest) It's not that I have a connection with the underwater world (though my real name means Pearl) but I was always fascinated by everything magical and mystical, so this competition really spoke to me :-)  
 
I really appreciate your visit and comment!

sensual passages in that quiet world,
interrupted only by the melodies of the dolphins...

Thank you so much for your comment, John!

Great to hear you enjoyed the sensuality... it was a pleasure writing this one :-)

This is such a beautifully written piece. This is by far one of my favorites of yours. I was captivated and I hope that you win. The colors and imagery really come to life.

Wow... that's such an amazing compliment, thank you so much!  
 
Captivated... I can't ask for more!  
This is one my favorites as well, so you make me smile big time :-)  
 
I really appreciate your visit and comment, Eswaller!

the ease imagery belies your skill much enjoyed this lyrical  word swim

Thank you so much for your comment!

Great to hear you enjoyed this one... it was a pleasure writing :-)

wow this is very beautifull.

i loved how you shaped the poem in that perfect shape, and how the readings flows in that perfect poem.

@)-'-,--

What a surprise to see you on my page :-)

Thank you so much for your amazing comment!
Calling this a perfect poem means a lot to me, I really appreciate your words!

You love to eat that line? Haha, you made me smile big time :-)  
 
Great to hear you love the picture, I doubted between that one and another...  
 
Thank you so much for your comment, Boian!

Oh the confluence of alliteration here is astounding!! This reads like a beautiful rolling wave! And, hot too! There's something mysterious and sexy about mermaids.

Thank you so much for another amazing comment!

I love this poem, so I embrace every comment she receives :-)

My work is really diverse and sometimes I try to focus on alliteration, sound, flow (not that good with terminology) so I appreciate it a lot that you mention that, thank you!

Thanks for the word! I didn't know Alliteration before you mentioned it.

ooohhhh...to think i almost i missed out on this?!..
thanks for mentioning this Duende...
lotsa metaphorical morsels you got here..

'we find each other in sea spells      
in waves of wishes and whispers '

'the corals dance tenderly      
mirror a rhythm of rapture '


'flocks of sea butterflies flutter by      
the dolphins cry a mystifying hymn '    

sea butterflies flutter by...sigh***
love that original play on words..

what i also dig is your overt/covert use of colors
graciously spaced throughout this gem

jade,azure,turquoise,aquamarine..

what a subtle yet sensual marination  
of deep sea hues painted with such
delicate strokes..


this was one helluva entry for
Jade's comp

You're welcome!    
   
When I released this poem I though 'if someone is gonna love it, it's Naajir' so I was a bit surprised to not find your comment and I'm glad I decided to mention it!    
   
You make me smile by mentioning the 'sea butterlies' stanza, because that is one of my favorites, together with the 'mirror a rhythm of rapture'    
   
I'm also very delighted that you mention the use of colours! I did that for the first time in Indigo and I knew I wanted to write another colour poem one day...    
   
I can't thank you enough for this very complimentary comment :-)

"
hungry lips kiss in divine bliss    
as longing arms find heaven    
   
spiralling upward in desire    
our tails entwined forever    
   
the corals dance tenderly    
mirror a rhythm of rapture    
   
we let our spirits drift away    
losing ourselves in turquoise"

Those lines give me the urge to float away in your passion and releasing into your lust... beautiful my dear

Thank you so much, Tim! This is one of my favorite poems, so I'm happy it caught your attention :-)

Almost erotic but an enjoyable read nonetheless.