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ADORE
A fine act led to unforeseen terror
Led to grow ghetto roses bound to
Paths ground by humanlike bones
Bones on wheels pulled by knuckles
Map battered from a chuckling mouth
Blubbling snot not not tears and I
Feel guilty - as if I could undo a rope
And free a tree from a slavering dog
And these kisses are not not love
Dog loyalty knelt by food and fist
Pram faced unwon sperm spun
For this grinding knot is not not love
For falling stars fall curtain curtail
Disappear appearing as if never here
And this uncivil war is not not love
But a door ajar with five doorposts
That makes not not sense
Accept to Solomon and the five senses
No more than a mountain stands before me
Or a river runs from me
Or to the one I adore
Led to grow ghetto roses bound to
Paths ground by humanlike bones
Bones on wheels pulled by knuckles
Map battered from a chuckling mouth
Blubbling snot not not tears and I
Feel guilty - as if I could undo a rope
And free a tree from a slavering dog
And these kisses are not not love
Dog loyalty knelt by food and fist
Pram faced unwon sperm spun
For this grinding knot is not not love
For falling stars fall curtain curtail
Disappear appearing as if never here
And this uncivil war is not not love
But a door ajar with five doorposts
That makes not not sense
Accept to Solomon and the five senses
No more than a mountain stands before me
Or a river runs from me
Or to the one I adore
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Re. ADORE
30th Oct 2016 2:44pm
what can i say, i adore it! fun stuff whale, a very interesting and unique flow of words to this. love the ending as well.
kudos t' ye.
kudos t' ye.
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Re: Re. ADORE
30th Oct 2016 4:03pm
Re. ADORE
Anonymous
30th Oct 2016 5:46pm
I had to hold my breath till the end. This is so heartfelt. Leaving me feeling so wanting to help. I don't believe it's guilt we feel in this. I believe guilt should be an emotion if you play a part of such madness. But feel empathetic to the blind.
✨Trish
✨Trish

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Re: Re. ADORE
31st Oct 2016 9:59am
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31st Oct 2016 6:17am
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Re: Re. ADORE
31st Oct 2016 10:00am
Re. ADORE
31st Oct 2016 7:09am
"Bones on wheels pulled by knuckles" almost gave me psychosomatic arthritis. Powerful image there and throughout in your write, every stanza is praiseworthy. The use of "not not" almost reminds me of the purposeful seeming whimsy that you might find in Lewis Carroll. Enjoyed this on several levels.
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Re: Re. ADORE
31st Oct 2016 10:03am
yes DC - I love the way that words and their alternate meanings can some how hover between parallax and paradox like Schrödinger's cat
Re. ADORE
31st Oct 2016 10:20pm
This is the epitome of acceptance through unmitigated circumstance
filtered with periodic thoughts of what if...laced with the destined fate.
This was a tongue, mind, and heart-twister, my brother.
filtered with periodic thoughts of what if...laced with the destined fate.
This was a tongue, mind, and heart-twister, my brother.
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Re: Re. ADORE
11th Nov 2016 9:36pm
Re. ADORE
Anonymous
11th Nov 2016 9:26pm
From this flowed river-ish
and I feel something steep
within me
powerful hun powerful
and I feel something steep
within me
powerful hun powerful

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Re. ADORE
14th Nov 2016 1:31pm
would claim it there
above the mountain & within the river
were we a door...
above the mountain & within the river
were we a door...
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