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Swans on the lake
There was an argument
over the worth
in a piece of grain,
It gave him the feeling
of fluidity and change,
He feels more pleasure
in his softness
rather my hardness,
Maybe that's why he
likes his softness pressed,
His agreeable stupidity;
the Swans on the lake,
suddenly there's feathers
and love-making.
over the worth
in a piece of grain,
It gave him the feeling
of fluidity and change,
He feels more pleasure
in his softness
rather my hardness,
Maybe that's why he
likes his softness pressed,
His agreeable stupidity;
the Swans on the lake,
suddenly there's feathers
and love-making.
Published 18th Oct 2016
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18th Oct 2016 10:09pm
I adore this, Pisha.
I'm uncertain if this is a reference to Leda,
but I like to think that differences clash into
love sometimes on the bank of a river.
I'm uncertain if this is a reference to Leda,
but I like to think that differences clash into
love sometimes on the bank of a river.
Our minds work much the same. The Swan’s love – reminding me of ideal beauty, commitment, and genuine grace. I love to find our parallels in nature and mythology. Thank you! :)
18th Oct 2016 11:52pm
"He feels more pleasure
In his softness,
Rather my hardness"
This part says many things to me - mostly of how it is that we are interchangeable in many ways, when they are soft - we are hard and vice versa. I enjoyed this piece immensely Dear Heart!
In his softness,
Rather my hardness"
This part says many things to me - mostly of how it is that we are interchangeable in many ways, when they are soft - we are hard and vice versa. I enjoyed this piece immensely Dear Heart!
19th Oct 2016 00:14am
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20th Oct 2016 12:36pm
There was an argument
over the worth
in a piece of grain
( opens strongly and takes the reader straight to it, the imagery packed into those three small lines, makes this opening fantastic.)
He feels more pleasure
in his softness
rather my hardness
( brilliant analogy of difference here! also liked how it was the reverse of the cliche' mussle man vrs the white clad innocence of the female form)
His agreeable stupidity;
the Swans on the lake,
suddenly there's feathers
and love-making.
(the metaphoric value & word play here is astounding! The beautiful comparison of soft white feathers and love making... A beautifully romantic yet erotic image there.)
Love it! Love it!
Al-x-
over the worth
in a piece of grain
( opens strongly and takes the reader straight to it, the imagery packed into those three small lines, makes this opening fantastic.)
He feels more pleasure
in his softness
rather my hardness
( brilliant analogy of difference here! also liked how it was the reverse of the cliche' mussle man vrs the white clad innocence of the female form)
His agreeable stupidity;
the Swans on the lake,
suddenly there's feathers
and love-making.
(the metaphoric value & word play here is astounding! The beautiful comparison of soft white feathers and love making... A beautifully romantic yet erotic image there.)
Love it! Love it!
Al-x-
21st Oct 2016 1:39am
I appreciate the love, and for that brilliant analysis; beautifully done. Thank you so much! :)
