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Devotions and Emotions
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Do you make wishes
Send them with attachments
love and loyalties
Devotions with emotions
Do they move you to acheive
Can you believe in heart duets
Or are we finding the light
guiding through the darker moments
Is that all you have
all you need
Or do you believe
Wish for more.
Do you make wishes
Send them with attachments
love and loyalties
Devotions with emotions
Do they move you to acheive
Can you believe in heart duets
Or are we finding the light
guiding through the darker moments
Is that all you have
all you need
Or do you believe
Wish for more.
Published 29th Sep 2016
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Anonymous
1st Oct 2016 4:27pm
Rose....it's the very middle of your poem that is the staple here...
"Do they move you to acheive <~~ Yes...and why?
Can you believe in heart duets <~~ because yes, I do...unequivocally, which leads to....
Or are we finding the light
guiding through the darker moments" <~~ this perfection!
With love - Taryn xoxo
"Do they move you to acheive <~~ Yes...and why?
Can you believe in heart duets <~~ because yes, I do...unequivocally, which leads to....
Or are we finding the light
guiding through the darker moments" <~~ this perfection!
With love - Taryn xoxo
1st Oct 2016 4:31pm
Great commenting
Did need a slight line arrangement but will leave it as is xD
Did need a slight line arrangement but will leave it as is xD
