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Raven
♥ Raven
she signed
all her letters
with calling me
Black butterfly
the day we met is
sculpted in my core
666 i should have
known better
she drew me in
with her toxic
emerald eyes
pale skin onyx
hair her attitude
arrogant & cocky
we spent weeks
in my bed living on
croissants coffee
cigarettes and
LOTS of sex
driving each
other for hours
in a row through
countless heavens
on a highway to hell
she had me in her
narcissistic spell
fuck, she was
so addictive
slowly she
sucked the
life out of me
leaving me for
DEAD
two years
of tears and
torment it took
to refind my self
but once in a blue
moon she flies by
the dark shadow
of my ✟Raven
she signed
all her letters
with calling me
Black butterfly
the day we met is
sculpted in my core
666 i should have
known better
she drew me in
with her toxic
emerald eyes
pale skin onyx
hair her attitude
arrogant & cocky
we spent weeks
in my bed living on
croissants coffee
cigarettes and
LOTS of sex
driving each
other for hours
in a row through
countless heavens
on a highway to hell
she had me in her
narcissistic spell
fuck, she was
so addictive
slowly she
sucked the
life out of me
leaving me for
DEAD
two years
of tears and
torment it took
to refind my self
but once in a blue
moon she flies by
the dark shadow
of my ✟Raven
Author's Note
Mylène F - Fuck them all.
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- Edited 27th Dec 2019 12:45pm
14th Sep 2016 7:27pm
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Re: Re. Raven
14th Sep 2016 7:39pm
Wow, thank you so much!
I was having some doubts, so... wow :-)
Your comment means a lot, as does including it in your reading list!
Thank you ♥
I was having some doubts, so... wow :-)
Your comment means a lot, as does including it in your reading list!
Thank you ♥
Re. Raven
14th Sep 2016 7:49pm
lovely Duende powerful feelings and images conveyed in this masterful write..
love Crim
love Crim
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Re: Re. Raven
14th Sep 2016 8:00pm
Thank you so much, dear Crim!
I always feel honored by your visits :-)
Love, Duende
I always feel honored by your visits :-)
Love, Duende
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14th Sep 2016 8:34pm
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14th Sep 2016 9:11pm
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14th Sep 2016 10:18pm
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Anonymous
14th Sep 2016 9:15pm
*Ooh*. . .I'm speechless. . .Erotic~les~ink. . .;). . .love to you, Lady. . .~Devlin.
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14th Sep 2016 10:19pm
No worries, Lady Devlin... I will make it up with the next one ;-)
Love to you...
Love to you...
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Anonymous
14th Sep 2016 9:24pm
Words which are felt.
Passionate pain....so potent.
Beautiful ink 💓
Passionate pain....so potent.
Beautiful ink 💓
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14th Sep 2016 10:21pm
Re. Raven
14th Sep 2016 9:59pm
Driving each
other for hours
in a row through
countless heavens
on a highway to hell
...
imagery that rocks the mind!!
...sounded like a journey of passion
that teetered into the realm of obsession..
from start to finish
this is one beautiful write..
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Re: Re. Raven
14th Sep 2016 10:26pm
Thank you so much, Naajir!
Imagery that rocks the mind!! > you always amaze me with your awesome comments!
Obsession... well, narcissists master the act of stalking (hence the flies by) but I knew one day I would make a poem out of it! It took me quite a while, but I'm glad the result is appreciated :-)
Imagery that rocks the mind!! > you always amaze me with your awesome comments!
Obsession... well, narcissists master the act of stalking (hence the flies by) but I knew one day I would make a poem out of it! It took me quite a while, but I'm glad the result is appreciated :-)
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15th Sep 2016 1:28am
Yup I agree with my bro. Naj. This certainly felt like obsession... Though I could sure go for some "fuckin the life outta me" right now lol... Deeply intense n outstanding inking! :)
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Re: Re. Raven
15th Sep 2016 5:37am
Great to see you again, Poetik!
Thanks for another amazing compliment, I appreciate your visits :-)
Thanks for another amazing compliment, I appreciate your visits :-)
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15th Sep 2016 2:01am
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15th Sep 2016 5:38am
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15th Sep 2016 3:03am
Beautiful and daring exotic tale. I've read a few of your works and the dynamic way of your presentation truly draws one in. Kind of want to stay there and read it over and over and over.......no matter the category.
Diggin' your words
*M*
Diggin' your words
*M*
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Re: Re. Raven
15th Sep 2016 5:41am
You leave me a bit speechless...
That you want to stay here and read it over and over again is the greatest compliment you can give me, thank you so much! I truly appreciate your comments!!!
That you want to stay here and read it over and over again is the greatest compliment you can give me, thank you so much! I truly appreciate your comments!!!
Re. Raven
15th Sep 2016 7:39am
I almost missed you posted this 😁 Your poetry is always beautiful. A woman so dark I couldn't resist. Suck away 😋
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Re: Re. Raven
15th Sep 2016 7:50am
Thank you so much for saying my poetry is always beautiful!
I truly appreciate your comment and yes... I will ;-)
I truly appreciate your comment and yes... I will ;-)
Re. Raven
15th Sep 2016 10:21am
Beautifully dark and raw...just what my dreams are made of. Powerful pen, indeed. :)
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15th Sep 2016 12:26pm
Thank you so much, Lady!
I can imagine your dreams are dark and raw, your writings are testimonies of that...
I can imagine your dreams are dark and raw, your writings are testimonies of that...
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15th Sep 2016 8:52pm
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16th Sep 2016 6:58pm
Very talented? That's an amazing compliment, thank you so much!
Your 'dude' made me smile :-)
I hope you meant Duende, or am I one of the guys now?
Your 'dude' made me smile :-)
I hope you meant Duende, or am I one of the guys now?
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16th Sep 2016 9:57pm
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17th Sep 2016 7:03am
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17th Sep 2016 11:46am
this is stunning, dynamic.
feel her touch when she's there;
feel it still when she's gone...
feel her touch when she's there;
feel it still when she's gone...
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17th Sep 2016 5:15pm
Thanks for another beautiful comment!
Yes... some people will always be a part of your life...
Yes... some people will always be a part of your life...
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Anonymous
19th Sep 2016 5:30pm
captivating write which digs deep into past memories of my own...loved these lines...
"Driving each
other for hours
in a row through
countless heavens
on a highway to hell"
With love - Taryn xoxo
"Driving each
other for hours
in a row through
countless heavens
on a highway to hell"
With love - Taryn xoxo
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19th Sep 2016 6:31pm
For me it's a great compliment that something I wrote brought back memories!
I'm glad Raven resonated with you... thank you for your comment!
I'm glad Raven resonated with you... thank you for your comment!
Anonymous
- Edited 21st Oct 2019 5:45am
21st Apr 2019 00:26am
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