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~in your depths~
come greet me at my shores
don't let me traverse
the cold waters alone
I have just to touch you
~~~
I reach out with my spirit
swimming through the sharks
seeking your essence
shivering when you pull away
~~~
the ocean deep is my soul
a lonely place to be without your light
~~~
you warm my waters
the sun reflected in your face
melting the icy fingers that embrace
~~~
I dive into your depths
to taste the real you
will you deny me?
Published 2nd Aug 2016
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2nd Aug 2016 7:18pm
The ocean is romantic and mysterious, and you make it your own.
'the ocean deep is my soul
lonely place to be with out your light
you warm my waters
with the sun reflected in your face"
Your soul and ocean are lovely Crim. Fine work, coming in with the tide....
'the ocean deep is my soul
lonely place to be with out your light
you warm my waters
with the sun reflected in your face"
Your soul and ocean are lovely Crim. Fine work, coming in with the tide....
2nd Aug 2016 11:17pm
Anonymous
2nd Aug 2016 7:21pm
Achingly beautiful as always.
2nd Aug 2016 11:19pm
Anonymous
2nd Aug 2016 7:32pm
There is nothing like those depths. The euphoria consumes, yet aches.
Something in which I both crave and fear.
Your words....are captivating. The imagery so very potent.
Brilliant ink.
Something in which I both crave and fear.
Your words....are captivating. The imagery so very potent.
Brilliant ink.
2nd Aug 2016 11:20pm
2nd Aug 2016 7:43pm
Perfect entreating poetry, Brenda. Seeking a lover
buried somewhere inside your id and his reluctant
is often a reluctant task. Then again if it is not worth
the fight is isn't worth anything.
buried somewhere inside your id and his reluctant
is often a reluctant task. Then again if it is not worth
the fight is isn't worth anything.
2nd Aug 2016 11:21pm
2nd Aug 2016 8:26pm
2nd Aug 2016 11:21pm
2nd Aug 2016 8:54pm
I love that you likened the ocean as cold...it's true, cold and deep. Warm pockets are rare. Beautiful!
2nd Aug 2016 11:23pm
thank you lovely Willow he is definitely a warm pocket in the sea of faces :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
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2nd Aug 2016 9:40pm
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2nd Aug 2016 11:23pm
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2nd Aug 2016 9:49pm
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2nd Aug 2016 11:24pm
2nd Aug 2016 9:51pm
it's a sensation of poetry, Crim.
you dive so deeply, bc you want him,
you want him to want you.
& we ask, with our sorrow, will he be there?...
you dive so deeply, bc you want him,
you want him to want you.
& we ask, with our sorrow, will he be there?...
2nd Aug 2016 11:26pm
thank you graciously John he is there enough through poetry and friendship..
love Crim
love Crim
2nd Aug 2016 11:33pm
2nd Aug 2016 11:35pm
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2nd Aug 2016 11:35pm
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2nd Aug 2016 11:44pm
3rd Aug 2016 1:07am
Your words created a yearn
beneath me. made shudder
Am speechless.
myprettylittlefuckinSaints..
-Howlings
beneath me. made shudder
Am speechless.
myprettylittlefuckinSaints..
-Howlings
3rd Aug 2016 2:28am
4th Aug 2016 00:15am
Anonymous
3rd Aug 2016 2:55am
My Beautiful Brenda....these words brought me to the place I was born under...you carry me off to tranquility....
"the ocean deep is my soul
a lonely place to be without your light
~~~
you warm my waters
the sun reflected in your face
melting the icy fingers that embrace"
I love you always
xoxo Taryn
"the ocean deep is my soul
a lonely place to be without your light
~~~
you warm my waters
the sun reflected in your face
melting the icy fingers that embrace"
I love you always
xoxo Taryn
4th Aug 2016 00:17am
thank you from my heart beautiful one I love you so much tender aquatic soul :)
xo Brenda
xo Brenda
3rd Aug 2016 3:04am
an excellent love and desire poem - the ocean is always such a rich bed of metaphors and emotional attachments everything from awe to fear :-)
beautifully written my dear Brenda :-)
beautifully written my dear Brenda :-)
4th Aug 2016 00:18am
thank you David it's funny that you should say that as I do feel awe and fear of this person..
love Brenda
love Brenda
3rd Aug 2016 4:13am
Brenda, only a fool could deny you.. this is simply luscious.. into the list it goes..
Dave
Dave
4th Aug 2016 00:19am
3rd Aug 2016 6:04am
Another beautiful work of art Crim! The depth of your pen's font is endless...
4th Aug 2016 00:21am
3rd Aug 2016 12:20pm
There's nothing to deny, all the answers lie within yourself just as the universe does...
Enjoyed...
Enjoyed...
4th Aug 2016 00:22am
3rd Aug 2016 3:49pm
Those who are afraid to open and experience will deny you;
but, in essence, they are denying themselves such beauty.
I beautiful write, Crim, We do brave the shark infested waters
for Love.
but, in essence, they are denying themselves such beauty.
I beautiful write, Crim, We do brave the shark infested waters
for Love.
4th Aug 2016 00:23am
3rd Aug 2016 4:24pm
Oh the ocean and the depth of it... Something beautiful in it but can also be lonely due to the vastness of it... I love this piece. Very soft but you can feel the longing....
~BSavvy
~BSavvy
4th Aug 2016 00:24am
thank you for such a wonderful comment yes the ocean is vast and cold and lonely without someone to journey with..
love Crim
love Crim
Anonymous
4th Aug 2016 2:16am
Precious Crim......stunning write......such a peaceful feeling this gave to me as I read thru.....luv it!!!! You're such a multi talented writer my friend......purple smiles & hugs xo :)
4th Aug 2016 4:09am
4th Aug 2016 6:48am
"Don't let me traverse the cold waters alone"
vulnerable strength throughout - great write
vulnerable strength throughout - great write
4th Aug 2016 9:50am
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