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god
,
As a child so high
I remember how
you'd spend a
summer's Saturday
morning rising
following along
an alley fence
on and on, in song
with a netted hoop
that you would
from time to time
SWOOP
o'er weedy scrub
that clung against
the weathered slats
in hopes to catch
a butterfly
which would startle
as you'd pounce upon
and watch it fight
to gain its flight
till capitulation
was in sight
and that's when I'd
upturn the net
and set it free--
and now you know
that it was me
A simple "spill" written with a friend in mind taken by suicide.
As a child so high
I remember how
you'd spend a
summer's Saturday
morning rising
following along
an alley fence
on and on, in song
with a netted hoop
that you would
from time to time
SWOOP
o'er weedy scrub
that clung against
the weathered slats
in hopes to catch
a butterfly
which would startle
as you'd pounce upon
and watch it fight
to gain its flight
till capitulation
was in sight
and that's when I'd
upturn the net
and set it free--
and now you know
that it was me
A simple "spill" written with a friend in mind taken by suicide.
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 29th Jul 2016
| Edited 11th Apr 2018
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Re. god
Anonymous
29th Jul 2016 5:27pm
It's a beautiful "spill," Jade. I'm so sorry for your loss :(
Willow
Willow

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Re. god
29th Jul 2016 6:31pm
Re. god
29th Jul 2016 7:10pm
It's a beautiful spill indeed Jadey. Your loss is irreplaceable and I feel sad hearing that, but hey..aren't we all gonna end up together once again sooner or later?
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Re. god
29th Jul 2016 9:52pm
Re. god
Anonymous
29th Jul 2016 11:33pm
A great poem Jade. Appreciate you revealing that suicide has entered your life, too.
Nothing but love for your heart.
Trish
Nothing but love for your heart.
Trish

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Re. god
30th Jul 2016 4:24am
Wonderful poem Jade, after reading the note at the end and re reading over the poem it felt so emotional, brought a tear. It was a truly beautiful "spill". Sorry for your loss.
~anonshadow😏
~anonshadow😏
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Re. god
30th Jul 2016 9:47pm
I too am sorry for your loss Jade. Very. There was a recent suicide in my family, and hopefully I'll be able to write about it one day. You take a fine memory and make it magic. Fine work!
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