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Meadowette
Whilst in the meadow I did lie
a whisp of snipe flew idly by
fine feathers tumbled to my brow
softer than a summer's cloud.
Now days grow short and grasses wither
I'm mindful what the sky delivered
and keep them in my pocket still
to ward away cruel winter's chill.
Warm in the meadow I did lie
a whisp of snipe flew idly by.
Published 21st Jul 2011
| Edited 24th Jul 2011
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22nd Jul 2011 7:00am
22nd Jul 2011 8:52am
Curious thing is I'm not really a fan of what I consider antique poetry, H.
This probably stems from when I was nine and my aging English teacher uncle gave me his heavily annotated Wordsworth compendium - sadly I could never decipher the old boy's scribbling - preferring to wallow in Ted Hughes for nature poetry, which my uncle considered akin to listening to death metal.
About this time I must have stumbled across the old English collective noun for snipe - so it seems some things take a long time to be purged from the system.
I feel much better now 'tis writ.
Appreciate your visit.
Best ~ Abra
This probably stems from when I was nine and my aging English teacher uncle gave me his heavily annotated Wordsworth compendium - sadly I could never decipher the old boy's scribbling - preferring to wallow in Ted Hughes for nature poetry, which my uncle considered akin to listening to death metal.
About this time I must have stumbled across the old English collective noun for snipe - so it seems some things take a long time to be purged from the system.
I feel much better now 'tis writ.
Appreciate your visit.
Best ~ Abra
24th Jul 2011 9:23am
of rhyming poetry.
great feel to this abra i enjoyed reading it.
i wonder if you might consider changing 'while' for 'whilst' it doesn't make much difference i know its just i figured it would fit the scene.
anyhoo great piece !
shine on!
great feel to this abra i enjoyed reading it.
i wonder if you might consider changing 'while' for 'whilst' it doesn't make much difference i know its just i figured it would fit the scene.
anyhoo great piece !
shine on!
24th Jul 2011 8:13pm
You are absolutely correct, I thought I had written 'whilst' rather than the much more modern sounding 'while'
I'm extremely grateful to you for pointing that out, Eamon. It's definitely more appropriate for the period flavour of this little ditty.
Appreciate your visit ~ Abra 'Antique' Cadabra.
I'm extremely grateful to you for pointing that out, Eamon. It's definitely more appropriate for the period flavour of this little ditty.
Appreciate your visit ~ Abra 'Antique' Cadabra.
