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NIGHT IN THE HILLS
betrothed in dark blocks
night the color of blood
no skies for saints
the moon has called me
from my hill the sea has fled
children racing home
her back to me
on the road ahead laughing
one day we’ll say goodbye
Published 22nd Jul 2016
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Anonymous
22nd Jul 2016 6:56am
You amaze me, Geoff.
With so few words.
A life story.
Love this!
With so few words.
A life story.
Love this!
Thank you! I deliberately tried to keep it sparse... letting the readers mind fill in the spaces and gaps...
I like when I make things small on purpose...
I appreciate your kind words...
geoff
I like when I make things small on purpose...
I appreciate your kind words...
geoff
22nd Jul 2016 7:41am
22nd Jul 2016 1:04pm
Thank you! That's is how I wrote it, as a study in image... can I say more with the pictures that the brain assembles than in the words I use...
your thoughts are deeply appreciated...
geoff
your thoughts are deeply appreciated...
geoff
22nd Jul 2016 12:55pm
22nd Jul 2016 1:09pm
Thank you! It was a study in image and scale... Here are big Ideas... reduced to the key thoughts that allow the mind to open... at least that was my hope...
your thoughts always show how close I come to the mark...
with deepest appreciation
geoff
your thoughts always show how close I come to the mark...
with deepest appreciation
geoff
