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mind the gap
The train had come merely to the end of the line
It was however not about to plunge itself down some deep valley
Or even throw itself off a sharp isolated cliff
She simply…
Exhaled – let off some steam
Stood still
Surveyed the surroundings
Before long part of the pictured it completed
It was however not about to plunge itself down some deep valley
Or even throw itself off a sharp isolated cliff
She simply…
Exhaled – let off some steam
Stood still
Surveyed the surroundings
Before long part of the pictured it completed
Published 19th Jul 2016
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20th Jul 2016 1:58pm
I love the conceptual gap in this
But I admit the last line tripped me up... "Before long part of the pictured it completed"
Was- part of the pictured it completed...intentional?
But I admit the last line tripped me up... "Before long part of the pictured it completed"
Was- part of the pictured it completed...intentional?
20th Jul 2016 2:32pm
20th Jul 2016 2:37pm
Call me BUT the line I pointed out doesn't seem phrased right or something I don't know lol
20th Aug 2016 11:44pm
ahh but you're still thinking about it - lol not so? was intended-promise and seems it serves purpose...curtsy bow
21st Jul 2016 6:25am
she came to rest;
it was mundane as compared to
the incline of the valley or the leap off the cliff,
but it satisfied her...
it was mundane as compared to
the incline of the valley or the leap off the cliff,
but it satisfied her...
