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FOREVER
forever
never coming
turns everything nothing
darkness lights the night
day extinguishes thought in blindness
to snuff every true red word
where is this plague's mother
in touching mystic fires
laying on hands
sourcing prayers
umbile
Author's Note: "umbile" is a word I made up meaning everything relating to things umbilical - the origin of first nourishment but also a kind of vampirism...
Published 11th Jun 2016
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11th Jun 2016 3:41pm
13th Jun 2016 3:06pm
thank you so much...
I really like the simplicity of the form... and I like how this one turned out...
geoff
I really like the simplicity of the form... and I like how this one turned out...
geoff
12th Jun 2016 1:59am
13th Jun 2016 3:08pm
thanks, kelly, one of my borrowings from poets throughout the ages... if I need a word that doesn't exist...
but should...
I make it...
geoff
but should...
I make it...
geoff
12th Jun 2016 6:54pm
"blindness in thought extinguishes day" - was the first thing i saw coming out of this construction... deep thoughts, and i do like the dual nature of your made-up word. [:
13th Jun 2016 3:11pm
yes - infinitely mutable - so is language - no word means the same thing twice - except Latin...
I like your inverse constrution...
thanks for the read...
geoff
I like your inverse constrution...
thanks for the read...
geoff
23rd Jun 2016 5:17am
Ok thank you for gifting a
new word..well for me it
is lol.
and such meaning takes me
many places alone. So, don't
surprised if my next has it
embedded.
Overall I love and feel this, it
gives off a nauseating yet
...sourceful sense.
-Howlings
new word..well for me it
is lol.
and such meaning takes me
many places alone. So, don't
surprised if my next has it
embedded.
Overall I love and feel this, it
gives off a nauseating yet
...sourceful sense.
-Howlings
15th Jul 2016 2:41pm
Howlings:
Pardon my now reply - I am finally at a resting place in my travels where I can - calmly - respond to things that have piled up on DUP...
I always find your thoughts fortifying - thank you for the appreciation of my invented word - it seemed to apply to the nature of my little poem...
look for more of my comments showing up in your poems...
geoff
Pardon my now reply - I am finally at a resting place in my travels where I can - calmly - respond to things that have piled up on DUP...
I always find your thoughts fortifying - thank you for the appreciation of my invented word - it seemed to apply to the nature of my little poem...
look for more of my comments showing up in your poems...
geoff
20th Jul 2016 2:59am
I have read this over and over again at least 10 times. Beautiful and thought provoking every time.
22nd Jul 2016 2:28pm
Thank you...
tried to engage the duality of things here FOREVER sounds positive - but also has a down side...
appreciate the comment and the follow -
geoff
tried to engage the duality of things here FOREVER sounds positive - but also has a down side...
appreciate the comment and the follow -
geoff
