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Thunder Rumbles in Space Silently
My soul sings to thee oh muse of my poetry
Unbind my fingers to manipulate the force of gravity
To align the stars in universal harmony
That beat with the rhythm connecting you and me
You are a mermaid swimming through the cosmic sea
Your sparkling presence writes a song across my galaxy
That lights the darkness where once I could not see
Guiding my hand to express our dance in a verse of artistry
Unbind my fingers to manipulate the force of gravity
To align the stars in universal harmony
That beat with the rhythm connecting you and me
You are a mermaid swimming through the cosmic sea
Your sparkling presence writes a song across my galaxy
That lights the darkness where once I could not see
Guiding my hand to express our dance in a verse of artistry
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"Unbind my fingers to manipulate the force of gravity
To align the stars in universal harmony" <-- I actually started to post your entire poem JJ, but these lines just dance across my optics in a way that moved me. Your pen just shifted the earth's axis and shook me all over. :) Lovely ink!
To align the stars in universal harmony" <-- I actually started to post your entire poem JJ, but these lines just dance across my optics in a way that moved me. Your pen just shifted the earth's axis and shook me all over. :) Lovely ink!
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2nd Jun 2016 10:56pm
A Tsunami that keeps rolling around and around
These rhymes keep flooding my mind like déjà Vu...
These rhymes keep flooding my mind like déjà Vu...
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4th Jun 2016 11:54pm
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5th Jun 2016 3:13am
Thank you! Always looking for new ways to express my respect for the muse!
JJ
JJ
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4th Jun 2016 3:01pm
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Anonymous
4th Jun 2016 5:01pm
JJ.......absolutely stunning write.......I felt the universe sway with the beat of my heart......luv this very much....RL for me......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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5th Jun 2016 3:37am
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Anonymous
4th Jun 2016 8:46pm
Your muse poems are always so moving and loving. Makes me ponder if your muse or your poetry is loved more. The family unit is a beautiful metaphor and the galactic imagery makes it simply heavenly!
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5th Jun 2016 9:36pm
Does any man love his wife or children more? Metaphorically speaking, that is...
Thanks for commenting Heather!
JJ
Thanks for commenting Heather!
JJ
Re. Thunder Rumbles in Space Silently
4th Jun 2016 11:13pm
you create a canvas of beautiful works that leave me envious and honoured to have been able to read...curtsy bow
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5th Jun 2016 9:33pm
You make me blush and humble me with such praise feenix! Thank you for the comment and curtsy bow!
JJ
JJ
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5th Jun 2016 9:20pm
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5th Jun 2016 9:31pm
Oh Grace, if you can't trust your muse, where will poetry come from? Lol
Thanks for commenting!
:) jj
Thanks for commenting!
:) jj
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23rd Jun 2016 2:26pm
You know...:) they make you sing and laugh, they make you cry...sources of inspiration but not all good.
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Anonymous
16th Jul 2016 1:33pm
This is breathtaking beautiful ....wrapped in a passionate flow, which makes the heartbeat race through every syllable.
I truly adore this piece.
I truly adore this piece.
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