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Soiled Rotten
Your ass looks pretty in pink in the palm of his hand, but
Friends can spank more deeply than lovers ever reach
Adrift upon an ocean where life passes quickly underneath
Perhaps falling off the top shelf will finally shatter your illusions
You know you deserve more than making mud in dirty water
So crack your shell and dump he hump that yokes your beaten heart
Every structure built needs a foundation that won't crumble on first touch
But where's the beauty in a work of art veiled behind layers of clinging dust
Only you can cleanse the crevasses that house the shadows of your soul
Just let the fire in your heart cast a brighter light than the darkness you've portrayed
Friends can spank more deeply than lovers ever reach
Adrift upon an ocean where life passes quickly underneath
Perhaps falling off the top shelf will finally shatter your illusions
You know you deserve more than making mud in dirty water
So crack your shell and dump he hump that yokes your beaten heart
Every structure built needs a foundation that won't crumble on first touch
But where's the beauty in a work of art veiled behind layers of clinging dust
Only you can cleanse the crevasses that house the shadows of your soul
Just let the fire in your heart cast a brighter light than the darkness you've portrayed
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Re: Re. Soiled Rotten
28th May 2016 2:33pm
You must have a poem alarm, I just posted that, lol. Thanks for commenting. Nice to know my words reach out beyond my mind...
JJ
JJ
Re: Re. Soiled Rotten
28th May 2016 5:44pm
I think I just happened to be on when you posted. I don't even get email notifications from this site...too distracting from work. lol.
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Re. Soiled Rotten
28th May 2016 2:23pm
Always easier to see from the outside...what needs to be done. Ahh, but the work it takes to walk away....not so easy. Beautifully written and very heartfelt. :)
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28th May 2016 2:37pm
Sometimes seeing is not enough. She expresses all these as flaws, yet still she falls to pieces...
Thanks for commenting Willow, you must also have a poem alarm. Where can I get one of those? I always feel late o the game...
JJ
Thanks for commenting Willow, you must also have a poem alarm. Where can I get one of those? I always feel late o the game...
JJ
Re: Re. Soiled Rotten
28th May 2016 2:44pm
Re. Soiled Rotten
28th May 2016 3:07pm
JJ so much wisdom in this write that I could easily apply to myself..
love these the lines..
"Only you can cleanse the crevasses that house the shadows of your soul
Just let the fire in your heart cast a brighter light than the darkness you've portrayed"
your brightness never fails to shine the light of enlightenment on any given situation..
love Brenda
love these the lines..
"Only you can cleanse the crevasses that house the shadows of your soul
Just let the fire in your heart cast a brighter light than the darkness you've portrayed"
your brightness never fails to shine the light of enlightenment on any given situation..
love Brenda
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Re: Re. Soiled Rotten
28th May 2016 3:18pm
That's what friends are for, enlightening the darkness that fear seals our eyes from seeing.
Thanks for commenting Brenda!
JJ
Thanks for commenting Brenda!
JJ
Re. Soiled Rotten
I interpreted this as a friend giving tough love, telling someone you care about what they 'need' to hear instead of what they 'want' to hear. Good ole' fashion spanking so to speak. ;) Sometimes our family can conceal the truth trying to spare feelings when they should be trying to reveal the truth. (Tell'em to toughin' up and move on, if you will...) *I could be totally off base with my observation, I have before.... #Sueme! :)
"Every structure built needs a foundation that won't crumble on first touch" <-----JJ, I freakin' love this! Such a profound statement.
ck your sixth line. xo
"Every structure built needs a foundation that won't crumble on first touch" <-----JJ, I freakin' love this! Such a profound statement.
ck your sixth line. xo
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Re: Re. Soiled Rotten
29th May 2016 3:09pm
Yes Tara, you are correct, though in her case, she sees the truth and still needs help doing what she knows she must do. Sometimes desire is stronger than survival...
Thanks for commenting and expressing!
JJ
Thanks for commenting and expressing!
JJ
Re. Soiled Rotten
29th May 2016 3:51am
Sometimes one short change onseself :) poetryman, for reasons best known to themselves.
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Re: Re. Soiled Rotten
29th May 2016 3:01pm
Acting against one's own self-interests is a pandemic affecting everyone. Thank you for commenting Grace!
JJ
JJ
Re. Soiled Rotten
31st May 2016 00:04am
Somehow I feel like this fits me perfectly... Or at least some things my friends have told me. Great read.
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Re: Re. Soiled Rotten
31st May 2016 1:19am
One of the wonderful aspects of art is that we can all see some part of ourselves in the big picture...
I think you are similar in many ways to she that this was written for... thank you for commenting Kitty!
JJ
I think you are similar in many ways to she that this was written for... thank you for commenting Kitty!
JJ
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Anonymous
2nd Jun 2016 2:28am
JJ.....this has so made me smile.......you're such an encourager of words.......for whoever you write this for is feeling down......I'm sure they're not now......luv this all the way thru.....the end are very uplifting words.......enjoyed very much.....purple luv & hugs xo :)
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2nd Jun 2016 3:00am
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Anonymous
4th Jun 2016 9:02pm
Wonderful words of wisdom JJ! Again with the magnificent metaphors! Never cease to amaze.
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8th Oct 2016 11:34am