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Butterfly Effect
I wish this attraction
was a chemical reaction
a pheromone induced stupor
where the noose was a little looser
and not choking out all reason
leaving it open season
for bad gallows humor
on what's become a tumor
a rampantly spreading cancer
for which death's the only answer
a final transformation
from a life of subjugation
to a colorful fluttering start
for this flightless frightened heart
Published 20th May 2016
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20th May 2016 3:49pm
21st May 2016 1:49am
💋 thank you but the title isn't original, I appropriated it as it felt fitting to the concept.
Anonymous
- Edited 20th May 2016 4:48pm
20th May 2016 4:17pm
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21st May 2016 1:58am
I agree, it is most often ourselves that tie knot in the noose we hang ourselves with.
Here the death is of ego and I was attempting to convey the metamorphosis from fear of love to a willing death of being grounded by that fear to the acceptance that love changing us is how we are "reborn" into a new (hopefully better) life/person. I may have missed my mark. 😮
Thank you for your thoughts on the poem.
Peace
V
Here the death is of ego and I was attempting to convey the metamorphosis from fear of love to a willing death of being grounded by that fear to the acceptance that love changing us is how we are "reborn" into a new (hopefully better) life/person. I may have missed my mark. 😮
Thank you for your thoughts on the poem.
Peace
V
20th May 2016 4:32pm
21st May 2016 1:45am
Anonymous
- Edited 21st May 2016 6:03am
21st May 2016 1:38am
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21st May 2016 1:42am
23rd May 2016 00:55am
The rhyming was really good. Well, you didn't really used extraordinary words or anything but the way you used them made it extraordinary. Good job here.
23rd May 2016 1:06am
23rd May 2016 1:13am
No problem there. I enjoyed the time reading. "Hal"? That's a first, made me feel like a Green Lantern. Peace. 😊
17th Aug 2016 11:55am
Ooo, yes! That's the dangerous kind of reckless attraction! I see.
Very nice ink!
Very nice ink!
Anonymous
18th Aug 2016 5:47pm
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