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Self-lover Drop
The phantom lover's voice changed with time.
He now asks me questions
And gives commands.
It's exhilarating,
This mind trick that sends you to little 'little deaths',
A sort of preview to possibilities
That you dream of daily,
And write about nightly.
It's blissfully blinding,
Exhausting
Painful pleases until you cry.
Back arched, lips open.
But you see,
The problem with imaginary lovers,
Once you've been fucked hard,
There's no one to cuddle with after
To gently bring you back down to earth.
You just fall.
And stare blankly into space.
Heart dead for a while.
And sometimes,
Tears fall.
...
He now asks me questions
And gives commands.
It's exhilarating,
This mind trick that sends you to little 'little deaths',
A sort of preview to possibilities
That you dream of daily,
And write about nightly.
It's blissfully blinding,
Exhausting
Painful pleases until you cry.
Back arched, lips open.
But you see,
The problem with imaginary lovers,
Once you've been fucked hard,
There's no one to cuddle with after
To gently bring you back down to earth.
You just fall.
And stare blankly into space.
Heart dead for a while.
And sometimes,
Tears fall.
...
Published 5th May 2016
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5th May 2016 00:41am
I so love to look in the afterglow at the person i am with...read their body with my fingertips as their story unfolds till they fall asleep...so I know what you are talking about....
5th May 2016 8:54am
That sounds really beautiful... I hope I get to experience that too... Thank you for commenting. :)
5th May 2016 9:06am
5th May 2016 2:19am
The things I could say about this piece I'm afraid would transform me into a tazer, perhaps even mjolnir.
JJ
JJ
5th May 2016 8:58am
Um...honestly, I can't understand your comment. :D But I wouldn't be shocked if one of these days, a comment or a poem would make me faint. Lol.
5th May 2016 6:46pm
!mao!!! Mjolnir is Thor's hammer. A Tazer is a device used to electrically shock people and subdue them. So when you say you would be shocked, that was the metaphor I was reaching for because your poem shocked me. Not the poem so much as it was you that wrote it. Not in a bad way, just that it was you. If I had written it, I would not have been even a little bit shocked. Maybe a tiny tingle, lol...
5th May 2016 6:56pm
Oh, you forget I have brothers, I know mjolnir! I know what a taser is too, I guess what I meant with the confused comment is the context of your comment. Reading back, now I get it. *sigh* I'm pretty slow today, eh? Buffering, lol.
5th May 2016 8:56am
fantasies serve their purpose;
not as warm as a lover's touch,
but too cold to live w/o them...
not as warm as a lover's touch,
but too cold to live w/o them...
5th May 2016 8:59am
5th May 2016 9:24am
Aaawww Dark I so know the feeling, n yet can u even imagine NOT having at least that 'dream lover??' But still I understand truly
5th May 2016 10:09am
Ha, Poetikmind. As I told you, I might end up doing something really stupid! Thank you for commenting. I really appreciate it. :)
6th May 2016 1:02am
6th May 2016 2:24am
Thank you, mysteriouslady... This is one of those after-midnight things, thoughts underneath that hound me until I give in and write them. Thank you for commenting, I appreciate it. :)
7th May 2016 7:50am
7th May 2016 4:17pm
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it, I think this poem is pretty much the first time I've really been straightforward... And thank you for the RL add. :) I greatly appreciate it.
Anonymous
11th May 2016 1:09pm
Loving this👌 it's seductive yet sadistic, my kind of thing
Thank you, Dying_daughter. I'm glad you loved it. :)
Seductive and sadistic yet I keep doing it...masochistic?
Thank you for following me and for the RL add. I truly appreciate it. :)
Welcome to DU...
Seductive and sadistic yet I keep doing it...masochistic?
Thank you for following me and for the RL add. I truly appreciate it. :)
Welcome to DU...
