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Grow Up Kid
Never kissed the devil
or held her hand
Spoke through her
till 4 in the morning
Swore I'd never love
her
So then why has the
fairy-god-mother
left a scar below the
left-man-boob?
They say Satan builds
soul connections first
I don't have a soul
to connect to; so
I'm a good mess
-x-x-x-
Published 29th Apr 2016
| Edited 19th May 2018
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29th Apr 2016 11:49am
Good stuff here, Al
..first stanza starts a bit jumpy, dunno if you've a typo or word-o between the second and third lines but I found it a tad confusing.
that said, I did get a feel of your thoughts throughout the stanzas so ot say happy days ...left man-boob heh heh
Good stuff Al, last one was pretty good too
*hat tip*
..first stanza starts a bit jumpy, dunno if you've a typo or word-o between the second and third lines but I found it a tad confusing.
that said, I did get a feel of your thoughts throughout the stanzas so ot say happy days ...left man-boob heh heh
Good stuff Al, last one was pretty good too
*hat tip*
3rd May 2016 9:35am
Oi thanks Craic
Edited and played on those first few lines; do they flow better now?
Glad you liked "left man boob" was kinda special to me.
Thank you for the pointers and lovely comment and the list on the last one.
You ROCK brother!
Al -x-
Edited and played on those first few lines; do they flow better now?
Glad you liked "left man boob" was kinda special to me.
Thank you for the pointers and lovely comment and the list on the last one.
You ROCK brother!
Al -x-
4th May 2016 12:43pm
This fucking rocks . .
and if I tell you, how much and far my
meaning connected with this piece. Ha!
nevermind
nevermind
nevermind
Its stings- settled upon my bones,
and kissed my marrow deep.
-Howlings
and if I tell you, how much and far my
meaning connected with this piece. Ha!
nevermind
nevermind
nevermind
Its stings- settled upon my bones,
and kissed my marrow deep.
-Howlings
12th May 2016 12:21pm
Ahhh Thank You Miss Howlings
Rather pleased to have met the marrow [ & connected]
plenty love @ you
Al -x-
Rather pleased to have met the marrow [ & connected]
plenty love @ you
Al -x-
