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...a little love poem
Is there any way to say to you
the greatest love poem,
the one that tells you the color
of our castle in the ocean
the one that gives measurement
to depth height & width,
to carry it through eternity
with all the thunder that falls through it.
Published 24th Apr 2016
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24th Apr 2016 3:09am
24th Apr 2016 4:13am
Beauty! (P.S. add the questionmark that you likely intended....or not....beauty either way)
24th Apr 2016 4:24am
thank you :) yes
without love,
where would we be?
(maybe don't
answer that) :)
without love,
where would we be?
(maybe don't
answer that) :)
24th Apr 2016 6:34am
Unless I actually expect the reader of my composition to answer a question, I do not use question marks. They change the enunciation of the sentence, whether by inner voice or in recitation. I enjoyed your poem's subtle emotion and fluidity of imagery. :)
24th Apr 2016 10:14am
I agree about the questionmark changing the enunciation. I think I liked it better without. It's a beautiful rumination of the heart, Pisha.
