Bachateros

Hullo

looked up the title, hadn't heard of it. must be sweeping across Europe as we speak

good job here, Ophie

you've probably already tried a comma after breaks in the third ..tough call

anyhow,  good stuff. nice little snippet leads to a nice image

Eamonn,

Nice of you to leave a comment. Bachateros refers to Bachata dancers. In this case, sensual bachata. If you look it up, you'll get a full idea of what i mean in this one..

The lack of comma makes it more intense, direct and keeps a momentum I really like.. Something like a break in a bachata song where you get a sudden stop so you can do a fancy move or so..

Glad you found it nice, although that wasn't my intention. Any reactions are always welcomed and encouraged.

makes sense, I get the music. you may need an it's instead of an its    
 
I've been thinking about this for a couple of days now, what you said about the image  
 
 [ y'know yourself,  sometimes it's hard to grasp the tone of a poem when it's in a minimalist form, and while the words are born from substance and feelings and make perfect sense to the author in  terms of where the words lead and what they mean, it can be difficult to get it across ]  
 
when I first read it I took note to see which genre you put it in because I had thought it subtle erotic  
 
 either way,  I like it a lot, and look forward to your future posts  
 
*hat tip*  


edit ..I see now it's in the erotic genre, for some reason I thought you had it in love  ...old age  

fair nuff,  you know your stufg

You checked out the music. That's cool of you!
I think an its suits it better as i'm referring to the body...

As for the minimalistic approach you are absolutely right. I tend to write more for myself rather than for an audience. Despite that, i'm a firm believer of the author being dead so whatever I write, it's up to the reader to make whatever he/she wants out of it. Poetry is not about what the poet means but what the reader makes of it, if anything.

You are also right about the category. Although it was erotic, I first added it to misc then changed it to erotic.

Thank you E.
Your country is  beautiful btw

wait   ....you were here and we didn't have a drink

wow  ...thats cold, Ophie ..real cold :P

in Dublin for 2 days! I wanted to pop by and say hi but there wasn't much time...

let's have that drink another time!

WOW

I'm neither spanish nor parisian

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Thanks for your comment.
Actually Bachata wasn't originated from China but from somewhere in South America.


Not a new word, just a word you weren't aware of..

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Thank you again.
I can see why you say that and maybe you're right.

your poem expresses the need for the couple to be in sync
in Bachata; it's an energized intricate dance...

the dancers are in sync with each other and ultimately in sync with the music.
do you know how to dance bachata?

I've never danced it but I could get it with some practice. it's amazing even to observe...

Beautiful and powerful, I love the minimal approach you took here.

Thank you, truly.

Much appreciated Mitica