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Kinky thoughts unveiled
Lately he gives in to them
Satisfies their needs
Tough toys join the game
Always good for moans and cries
Who’d have thought it then
Whisp’ring under pain
She thanks him for the treatment
Smiling through her tears
Softly cradling her
Kisses ease her laboured breath
Safely in his arms
Lately he gives in to them
Satisfies their needs
Tough toys join the game
Always good for moans and cries
Who’d have thought it then
Whisp’ring under pain
She thanks him for the treatment
Smiling through her tears
Softly cradling her
Kisses ease her laboured breath
Safely in his arms
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24th Feb 2016 11:54am
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Thank you, wallyroo92. This piece indeed consists of 4 linked haikus which is called 'renku'. Glad you like it :-)!
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22nd Feb 2016 3:30pm
Tough toys join the game
Always good for moans and cries
Who’d have thought it then
Good one
Always good for moans and cries
Who’d have thought it then
Good one
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You picked out my favorite stanza/haiku, at least it shows the underlying thought that triggered the renku :-). Thank you!
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22nd Feb 2016 11:55pm
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24th Feb 2016 1:47pm
Thank you so much, Rain! I think that's the keynote about those special games, the important feeling of being safe, no matter what. xoxo
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27th Feb 2016 5:44am
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28th Feb 2016 4:40pm
Thanks so much, John. It's the little roughness that makes some things interesting :-).
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23rd Mar 2016 6:21pm
Thank you for giving this piece so much consideration, todski28. I appreciate it!
You put it in a nutshell. Old-fashionedly sex goes with love. Times are changing but men learned to respect women and treat them well. So being rough in bed with a woman seems to be kind of a contradiction. Fortunately lovers are rethinking traditional and moral principles since long according to the motto: anything you fancy goes :-).
You put it in a nutshell. Old-fashionedly sex goes with love. Times are changing but men learned to respect women and treat them well. So being rough in bed with a woman seems to be kind of a contradiction. Fortunately lovers are rethinking traditional and moral principles since long according to the motto: anything you fancy goes :-).
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26th May 2016 1:12pm
I find this beautiful and sensual Miss Chi. It takes more than a fleeting
trust to lay in this bed. All power to you Miss Chi. As always, thank you. xo
trust to lay in this bed. All power to you Miss Chi. As always, thank you. xo
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Aw...Twich! It's so good to hear from you! Thank you so much for your encouraging comment! I hope you're well?
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19th Dec 2016 11:52pm
I'm always ok Miss Chi. I just forget to see that sometimes. Self involvement can have that effect. Lol. But it's always good to talk to you (and read you) lovely. 😊
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Anonymous
17th Jul 2016 2:33am
May I know what the characters in the title mean?
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17th Jul 2016 1:55pm
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Anonymous
17th Jul 2016 4:46pm
Ach, so.
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11th Aug 2018 3:55am
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