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Cracked Soul
I remember somethings like yesterday
other things bring a tear
then I remember too much
almost as if the sands of time in an hour glass
has stopped for just a moment
bringing back sad memories hidden within
blood runs thru cracks of my soul
dripping heavy tears shattering veins
breaking heart barriers that holds you and me
you forgot hurtful times
memories quickly reminded me
then I realized my emotions have changed
from us.....to empty
(Inspired by the first 6 lines (which are mine)
and the rest from this amazing picture)
Copyright © 2016 Flowergirl All Rights Reserved
other things bring a tear
then I remember too much
almost as if the sands of time in an hour glass
has stopped for just a moment
bringing back sad memories hidden within
blood runs thru cracks of my soul
dripping heavy tears shattering veins
breaking heart barriers that holds you and me
you forgot hurtful times
memories quickly reminded me
then I realized my emotions have changed
from us.....to empty
(Inspired by the first 6 lines (which are mine)
and the rest from this amazing picture)
Copyright © 2016 Flowergirl All Rights Reserved
Published 28th Jan 2016
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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28th Jan 2016 6:38am
Good Morning JJ.....I can remember too back then......I learned a valuable lesson and moved on with extreme caution.....sorry you felt this.....thank you for your time and words.....luv and hugs xo :)
28th Jan 2016 11:13am
28th Jan 2016 12:51pm
Good Monring Kavik......unfortunately I'm sure we all can.....want to let you know that I'm fine though......the first 6 lines I wrote to someone as an on the spot thought......the rest I felt when I saw this pic.....I've long moved past this.....as I hope you have.....don't keep your heart imprisoned......you're such a sweet soul......that's my on the spot thoughts again......LOL!! xo :)
28th Jan 2016 3:53pm
Matters not where this poem was inspired from, flower,
what matters is that you were inspired and bent your
pen toward the words within your soul and penned an
excellent masterpiece!
what matters is that you were inspired and bent your
pen toward the words within your soul and penned an
excellent masterpiece!
28th Jan 2016 5:39pm
Hey SMG......thank you for such honored words.......I enjoyed writing this one actually even though it doesn't appear that way.....LOL!! I appreciate your words and friendship very much......hope you have a great day.....luv and hugs xo :)
28th Jan 2016 7:56pm
No way you're empty Flower! You're replete with love and talent, and your work glows. This is a sad one but your sweetness always shines through. Excellent choice of pictures too, but I hope it doesn't run out. I'm a blood donor just in case....
28th Jan 2016 10:58pm
Hi Crow......honored to see your sweet smile back upon my page.......no I'm not empty......I have way too much passion within me to ever bleed out......luved the pic when I saw it......I actually changed the original write to compliment it......thank your for your always sweet words.....btw I'm a donor too......luv and hugs xo :)
29th Jan 2016 4:57pm
It is a nicely composed poem with an apt title. A series of vocabulary items builds a panorama connoting a sense of disharmony and anguish, Having faced disenchantment in inner self, the narrator remains disillusioned at the crossroad of life. Reassessing the truth and failure, the narrator with tremendous conviction wishes to touch a smile dipping fingers in the frost plunging self in shattering all obstacle. Nicely penned creating fresh images in burning simplicity and deft brevity of expressions, the flow of thoughts adds beauty to the poem.
29th Jan 2016 5:30pm
Hi PoemHunter......thank you for stopping and visiting my page......I so appreciate your take on this write.......I read it again after I read your comment......you actually have made me feel it differently......thank you for leaving me such expressive words......xo :)
29th Jan 2016 7:35pm
This piece started on a high note. Then it rises and keeps rising like... like...
*sigh*
Words fail me sometimes. A most beautiful write.
*sigh*
Words fail me sometimes. A most beautiful write.
30th Jan 2016 2:19am
Awe Wanderer.....thank you thank you!! You wrote enough to feel your meaning and emotions.....pore irate you always......luv and hugs xo :)
30th Jan 2016 00:52am
30th Jan 2016 2:21am
Honored Poet by your words.....masterpoet of any subject......thank you for stopping by and leaving me a luving smile......luv and hugs xo :)
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1st Feb 2016 11:17pm
Thank you Sweet S.....so glad you enjoyed this.....all is well in the purple world......appreciate you feeling the emotions......I was very inspired by this awesome pic......thanks for the smile and luv you've left me xo :)
2nd Feb 2016 10:03am
3rd Feb 2016 2:14am
HI Ossy....what a wonderful and honored surprise to see you on my purple page......welcome back.....hope all is well with you.....thank you for leaving your thoughts on this one.....I actually enjoyed writing this one.....again it's good to see you again.....xo :)
2nd Feb 2016 7:44pm
Hearts get broken and they are hard to fix when all you want to do is defend. I have learned to heal you actully have to let someone close so they can help you make the best of you tattered fragmented soul.
Very good write flower I really loved every line it made me remember the bad but some of the good times I had wit the person who broke me
Very good write flower I really loved every line it made me remember the bad but some of the good times I had wit the person who broke me
Oh Heart.....you're words have weaved thru my soul.....it's the letting someone close that I'm not good at.....so scared of closeness cause that's what gets you hurt or be made a fool of all over again.....I can't do that again......I will do some thinking of what you said.....cause I see your points.....thank you so much for sharing your personal thoughts with me......thank you for honor of the RL add on...luv and hugs xo :)
