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INSULTED AT THE AWARDS NIGHT
(Originally in Write a Poem involving the Breasts comp.)
That guy who said I've got 'small tits'
When he was drunk out of his wits,
Causing mother dear to have fits
(I'd invited her to the Brits) -
I'd knee him in the dangly bits
Or blacken his eyes with my mitts!
Hope girl he was with gives him nits!
That guy who said I've got 'small tits'
When he was drunk out of his wits,
Causing mother dear to have fits
(I'd invited her to the Brits) -
I'd knee him in the dangly bits
Or blacken his eyes with my mitts!
Hope girl he was with gives him nits!
Published 16th Jan 2016
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16th Jan 2016 10:07pm
nice little rhyming poem, fun to read, and makes sense.
often a word can be cause of pause, one such word was the "I'd" at the start of the fifth line. the one above it fits grand ( I had invited her) but the one in question (I would knee him)
could be way off but I'd expect and 'if ' to come into play (I would knee him in his dangly bits if..)
anyhow, nothing major, just a thought
good stuff
shine on
often a word can be cause of pause, one such word was the "I'd" at the start of the fifth line. the one above it fits grand ( I had invited her) but the one in question (I would knee him)
could be way off but I'd expect and 'if ' to come into play (I would knee him in his dangly bits if..)
anyhow, nothing major, just a thought
good stuff
shine on
