invisible spaces

spaces we can't traverse & words without mercy,
so we pretend.

yes we do...

Thank you for stopping by and leaving your thoughts John :).
Sometimes to pretend is enough, and sometimes it gets too much.

Captivating Indie.
Lulu

Thank you very much lulu for your lovely comment and add. I'm glad you enjoyed. :)

A poem about invisible spaces that makes that makes the heart race. I an enraptured by the phrase "I can feel the words you don’t speak
a million miles away", brilliant write, so full of feeling!

Thank you so much for your wonderful compliment Viddax, always good to get such awesome feedback. It's much appreciated.

just...beautiful

Thank you :)

OMG!  "And I would fuck the essence of you
just so I can pretend I’m not alone
feel your eccentricities brush up against mine
and make us whole again
if only for a moment"<-- this stanza leaped from the page and jumped down my throat!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
This entire poem was....was....just....just.... jeez... got me speechless! INCREDIBLE!

Miss Indie, it's a pleasure to be in your poetic corner. I'm humbled by the connection! I've always had a deep respect for your pen's voice....

Wow, thank you so much, for your awesome comment. I'm so glad this piece hit you the way it did.

"I welcome your invisible presence;
 words lost in the stratosphere, a
 world between us that we’ve
 learned to make our own"

This hauntingly sad poem came out
from you as ethereal and intimate in
profundity of insight.

It either sounds like you are referencing
someone that you've lost or who is there
still: "I welcome your invisible presence;"
but maybe there's some kind of
disconnection that separates
the two.

But, you make do with it: "words
lost in the stratosphere, a world
between us that we’ve learned to
make our own," and have learned
to somehow reconcile this
inconvenience.

Anyway it goes though, this poem
is very impacting and causes
inflection to be upon all who
are graced by reading it.

  Enjoyed this piece... Dantalion

  P.s - I hope that you don't mind the
          edit that I made when I copied
          and pasted in the punctuation... I'm neurotically A.D.D about
                                                         punctuation so, "Blame it on
                                                                                  My, A.D.D!

Thank you Dantalion for you lovely feedback. I'm glad this piece hit the way I intended and caused some food for thought. I love seeing my piece back through other people's eyes, I always see something I didn't know was there before. As for the punctuation, you're quite welcome to correct me. I try not to overthink it as I'm writing, or I end up with literary paranoia and no poetry.

Thanks again :)

'...a world filled with too many words
that aren’t our own '

Beautifully put and what an expression of un-belonging. Sometimes it's necessary to find a void to retreat into and finalise the divorce from a world without significance - for a while anyway.