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Though I May Try ... There is No Perfect Place nor Time to Love You
When I first wrote my name on your body
it was as a child would.
Grabbing every crayon from the box.
Trees were purple and blue.
Grass was orange.
The sky yellow.
The dog red.
Didn't understand the lines and curves I slalomed over aimlessly
with my broad strokes.
I needed to feed my ego.
Not my soul.
My tongue poking out and wrapped tight around my upper lip
because I wanted to prove I could master this creation.
Nonetheless you guided me patiently.
Tenderly.
Life weathered hands cupped my face to steer my eyes.
Exquisitely.
I inhaled your musk letting it drape my throat.
Ignoring my hubris.
The soft slopes of your body
were not defined by the lines
of Gauguin nor Degas.
You tried to teach me this
as you pealed back your supple layers
turning another page.
I foolishly ripped it.
Turned again
ripped again.
Turned
ripped.
Reckless though I was
you let me lay beside you.
Plucking the caramel of your skin
and the cinnamon dusted over it
as a boy would.
Lying on your side I saw your true form
Your hips ripe and full
imbued with the strength of ebony
not the meek ramblings of a blown dandelion.
The concentric circles of your breasts
giving flight to my infinite dreams
feeding my hapless soul.
I listen to your heart
and it says you still want me to stay
though others lay lies like train tracks
between us.
So I'll put away the crayons
and use my spine for a quill
trying to define the undeniable that is
You.
Published 28th Dec 2015
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Soulful and beautiful write, San Pedro.
Very deserving win.
'were not defined by the lines
of Gauguin nor Degas.'
To exceed the masters...
Very deserving win.
'were not defined by the lines
of Gauguin nor Degas.'
To exceed the masters...
29th Dec 2015 3:46am
... such beauty eclipses everything because it starts within ...
Thank you for commenting and acknowledging this, it means a lot
Thank you for commenting and acknowledging this, it means a lot
28th Dec 2015 10:28pm
29th Dec 2015 3:49am
... I'm glad it touched you. The insecurities of a poet made me wonder if I'd overwritten it with the constant editing; but if it moved you so, then it was worth it ... And thank you for the RL add as well
Anonymous
29th Dec 2015 3:31am
LSP,
The master holds the quill while being lead by the Divine!!!
tornado
The master holds the quill while being lead by the Divine!!!
tornado
29th Dec 2015 3:52am
The release of it all with her is the true divinity ... Thanks for the read and comment
29th Dec 2015 7:33am
a painting is most beautiful in the artist's eyes.
an ode to True Women...
an ode to True Women...
29th Dec 2015 9:52am
... On that note I'd have to acknowledge two poets here ... MsRockyJackson - I actually started developing this piece because of a writing prompt she gave for a competition she hosted called LOVELY BODIES ...
... But as I fleshed it out I found the moments of self realization made it more suited for a competition hosted by calamitygin ...
I consider them both "True Women" ... And I'm indebted to them
Thanks as always John
... But as I fleshed it out I found the moments of self realization made it more suited for a competition hosted by calamitygin ...
I consider them both "True Women" ... And I'm indebted to them
Thanks as always John
Anonymous
29th Dec 2015 7:34am
Simply put... WOW
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29th Dec 2015 4:49pm
Thank you! ... Your kind words are appreciated .. All the best in the coming year.
29th Dec 2015 11:02pm
5th Jan 2016 9:58am
This is so amazingly beautiful, I'm a little too floored right now to leave a better comment than this.
5th Jan 2016 11:37pm
I'm just happy you found it ... I've missed seeing you around.
Thank you for the read and comment, it was more than generous.
Thank you for the read and comment, it was more than generous.
8th Jan 2016 1:03pm
9th Jan 2016 10:20am
Thank you Zazzles ... As always I greatly appreciate the feedback from you.
Anonymous
15th Feb 2016 11:33pm
With patience there is time to love. Does love have a time limit?
17th Feb 2016 11:11pm
Anonymous
18th Feb 2016 00:25am
Love has no time limit, surely?
I have a cousin who was recently diagnosed with myeloma (cancer of the blood, incurable) ... It won't be long before he no longer knows the love of his wife, his sons or grandchildren.
His youngest brother, many years ago, was killed at the age of 9 in a horrific accident. He never came to know the full joys of love; nor my cousin's niece that died of a heroin overdose at 21 ...
Our grandmother succumbed to Alzhiemers in her final years not knowing the difference between herself and her own reflection in the mirror, and while she was still loved, she no longer knew how to express it ...
... And there are those poets here, who can express more eloquently than I, the anguish of losing love, falling out of love or perhaps never knowing love at all ...
So yes, love does have a time limit ... It's called life, and death.
His youngest brother, many years ago, was killed at the age of 9 in a horrific accident. He never came to know the full joys of love; nor my cousin's niece that died of a heroin overdose at 21 ...
Our grandmother succumbed to Alzhiemers in her final years not knowing the difference between herself and her own reflection in the mirror, and while she was still loved, she no longer knew how to express it ...
... And there are those poets here, who can express more eloquently than I, the anguish of losing love, falling out of love or perhaps never knowing love at all ...
So yes, love does have a time limit ... It's called life, and death.
Anonymous
24th Feb 2016 1:20pm
In the life & death sense, or black & white, love has its limits perhaps. The example I was trying to use in love was based on your poem & from my own & other people's experiences. Take Richard & Liz for instance; they fell in & out of love a few times. For some, there is no time limit for when they might finally fall for their partner. Love can grow & become stronger. That is the true definition of love for me.
31st Mar 2016 2:47am
This is so deliciously devine, a pleasure to read and easy to get inspiration from... Love Love Love
31st Mar 2016 6:40am
Thank you so much for your kind words ... It's greatly appreciated vessa.
Salud
Salud
Anonymous
15th Jul 2016 00:36am
To be adorned with patience while struggling within the confines of an idealized self...until awareness met love....
Truly a profound and exquisite piece
My brotha...
Truly a profound and exquisite piece
My brotha...
15th Jul 2016 1:51am
Coming from a poet whose work I respect and admire, I'm greatly touched by your comments ... I just hope I can keep writing at a level worthy of your time and attention brotha
Salud
Salud
17th Jul 2016 3:24am
If I may ,
I don't even think words will compensate here.. The beauty in this piece is epic and resonates within .. You are truly amazing at what you do .. Every piece I read is timeless and I feel your presence! Thank you for this
I don't even think words will compensate here.. The beauty in this piece is epic and resonates within .. You are truly amazing at what you do .. Every piece I read is timeless and I feel your presence! Thank you for this
17th Jul 2016 2:23pm
Thank you for those gracious and humbling words, our mutual respect for each other as writers is what makes this such a wonderful community.
Salud
Salud
29th Jul 2016 6:10am
You've left me voice'less,'
it's intensively compos'd,
amply beautiful and enriching.
Submersed
-Howlings
it's intensively compos'd,
amply beautiful and enriching.
Submersed
-Howlings
29th Jul 2016 11:13am
Thank you for the wonderful comment and RL add ... I'm glad you and so many others have embraced this so
Anonymous
15th Aug 2016 12:22pm
Writings from your pen. Is like going shopping when your starving. Every time I read something you have written. I have to pause and tell myself is this a need or a want. I want to read everything to get to your level. When I realize I need to learn so much more.
Your list is feast of educated thought and life.
Thank you for sharing what you write. I can't even imagine what you are currently writing.
Always Respect, Trisha
Your list is feast of educated thought and life.
Thank you for sharing what you write. I can't even imagine what you are currently writing.
Always Respect, Trisha
15th Aug 2016 1:05pm
Firstly, thank you for the RL add.
I try to write simple truths about my life, when I do those pieces seem to connect most with others. So again thank you for recognizing and connecting with my truths being peddled in my humble country grocery store.
... And yes I have quite a bit cookin' in the store's kitchen.
Peace
I try to write simple truths about my life, when I do those pieces seem to connect most with others. So again thank you for recognizing and connecting with my truths being peddled in my humble country grocery store.
... And yes I have quite a bit cookin' in the store's kitchen.
Peace
