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Very nice. its beautiful in itself. fair play.  bit off topic, but there's an Emily Dickinson comp running

anyhow, my suggestion would be to utilize line breaks for impact. that said, its a soft enough poem so maybe impact is excess.

try a couple of variations, see what you think.

Good stuff, lady

Keep shinnin'

complete in its amorous expression...

Heavy handed for such a feather-weight piece.

there was some restrictions
posting comments on the other one
did u place such
i doubt though
don't wonder

what restrictions? i haven't done such thing

thank U
I have observed when you go into silence
'tis like meditation
you come up with deliberations
of poetic insinuations
I wonder if i can say issuance
would be an appropriate word
I shall check
and revert
madame

Hi Ohpeliac......this is so simple.....yet so beautiful in its serene feel.....enjoyed this very much.....purple hugs xo :)

much appreciated.
thank you

Very happy to read you again <3

This is beautiful. I agree with Eamon's suggestion to break it up a little, though. Ex:

My soul
is beautifully resting
on yours

Hey thanks for reading, commenting and adding it to your list.

I really like your take on it and i think you're right in saying it makes a difference.
Thanks, i've changed it.

Perfect!