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22nd Jun 2011 4:48pm
Why is the whole thing in quotes? Is it a play on some famous quote? I'm definitely missing something there.
I don't know if you need to put "Haiki" in the title necessarily. You could always put that underneath your poem as a footnote. Unless I misunderstood that too and your Haiki is about hating Haikus. :)
Otherwise, it's great. Very intense on very few words. I like it!
I don't know if you need to put "Haiki" in the title necessarily. You could always put that underneath your poem as a footnote. Unless I misunderstood that too and your Haiki is about hating Haikus. :)
Otherwise, it's great. Very intense on very few words. I like it!
