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indigo woman

with lips sewn up
she still contrives
to show you her teeth

taken up taken in
with your quirky ideas
she's the one
you turn to
needing comfort
finding grief

if you must
kill her slowly
it's better

to watch her toss and turn
blinking her eyes in confusion

when you've pinned her
up on your wall
the force of her hand is a joy
the spit on your cheek
is a blessing
when a kiss is a bore
she talked you into
string on your fingers

she's a child
she just wants to play with her toys
she's a demon
she just wants to fuck other boys
she's a con
she's not what she showed you at all
she's a martyr
her pride's in how far she can fall

and people say she doesn't know
it's so funny she has no idea she
doesn't know

Written by anna_grin

(ANNAN)

Published 29th Nov 2015 | Edited 1st Jun 2020

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Re. indigo woman

anna_grin (ANNAN)

29th Nov 2015 3:27pm

draft idea

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Re. indigo woman

lepperochan (Craic-Dealer)

- Edited 30th Nov 2015 00:45am

29th Nov 2015 10:24pm

in fairness though, I think the first three lines serve great for a lead ..I wondered whether sewn up lips might be a bit clich�. ..its a gamble I suppose. next two lines have a fair bit of strength in them though.

the taken up taken in stanza has a different fee l to it, a different voice or personality even. happy days if that's what you were going for. I think if you put onto into the 'up on your wall the extra syllable helps with the flow onto the next line.

I spent a bit of time thinking about some different interpretations. I mean especially with the first three lines taken into consideration. when a kiss is a bore talked you into string on your fingers is a great line. maybe when a kiss was a bore. ..and you've two hers on one of the lines. best of luck finding them.

its a helluva draft idea.